Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail (when/why) and one short consequence. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired after a long day at work because I’m on my feet all day and expending a lot of mental energy. As a result, I usually feel low on energy and prefer to rest rather than do other tasks.

제안: Complete your sentence and avoid grammatical errors. Give a clear time frame and one specific cause, linked with a reason. Use a linking word like "or" or "because."

예시: I usually feel tired mostly after work or when I have stayed up late the night before, because lack of sleep makes it hard for my body to recover.

제안: Be more natural and correct vocabulary (avoid words like "territors"). Use two linked actions with clear reasons and one result. Keep it within 3–4 sentences max.

예시: When I feel tired I usually have a cup of coffee or tea and then go for a short walk, because the caffeine and fresh air help wake me up. This routine refreshes me and reduces my fatigue fairly quickly.

제안: Good content but slightly repetitive. Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No), then give a specific condition and brief reason. Use linking words like "unless" or "if" to make it concise.

예시: Not usually — I avoid casual outings when I’m tired unless there’s an important reason to go, because I prefer to rest and get enough sleep.

× I do feel tired when I'm back from my work after a long day of work, I do feel tired and really less energetic to do any of the tasks of the day.

✓ I do feel tired when I come back from work after a long day; I feel less energetic to do any tasks.

The original mixes present simple and awkward phrasing. 'I'm back from my work' is unnatural for habitual actions; use 'I come back from work'. 'Really less energetic' is unidiomatic; use 'feel less energetic'. Also split into two clauses with a semicolon or separate sentence for clarity. Use present simple for habitual states. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Mostly after the work or when I used to sleep late in the morning, when I feel a lot of tiredness and my body

✓ Mostly after work or when I sleep late at night; then I feel very tired and my body feels weak.

The phrase 'used to sleep late in the morning' incorrectly uses 'used to' which implies a past habitual action; the context asks when you feel tired now, so use present simple 'sleep late' and correct time expression to 'at night' or 'late at night'. Complete the sentence by adding 'feels weak' for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× I mostly take caffeine, a coffee or a tea and then I usually go for a walk. So it's a refreshing thing that I do that I'm used to do and then most of the territors just go away with this.

✓ I usually have caffeine, like coffee or tea, and then I go for a walk. It's a refreshing thing I am used to doing, and most of the tiredness goes away afterward.

Use 'have' for beverages rather than 'take caffeine'. 'I'm used to do' is incorrect; after 'used to' use the gerund: 'used to doing' or better 'am used to doing'. 'Territors' is a misspelling of 'tiredness'. Ensure parallel verb forms and correct noun. (Grammar problem type ID:8)

× If there is a bigger reason for me to meet my friends then yes, if it's just a casual hangout then I do avoid it and I do get my proper sleep

✓ If there is a good reason for me to meet my friends, then yes; if it's just a casual hangout, I avoid it and get my proper sleep.

Avoid unnecessary 'do' auxiliaries in affirmative statements ('I do avoid it' -> 'I avoid it'). 'Bigger reason' is awkward; use 'good reason' or 'strong reason'. Use commas to separate clauses and keep present simple for habitual choices. (Grammar problem type ID:4)

× Mostly after the work or when I used to sleep late in the morning, when I feel a lot of tiredness and my body

✓ Mostly after work or when I sleep late at night; I then feel very tired and my body feels exhausted.

Original sentence is incomplete and has poor structure, ending abruptly. Provide a full main clause after the subordinate clause. Use consistent present tense for habitual actions and replace vague phrases with precise vocabulary. (Grammar problem type ID:26)