Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и кратко: сначала непосредственно ответьте на вопрос, затем приведите одно-два конкретных объяснения. Избегайте неправильной грамматики и лишних фраз (например, «at last time», «in the school», «go to home»). Используйте простые времена и корректные предлоги.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. I study and attend extracurricular classes at school, so by the time I get home I usually feel exhausted.

제안: Дайте ясный и конкретный ответ и избегайте бессвязных фраз. Уточните ситуацию (например, плохая погода, долгие прогулки) и используйте подходящие временные/местные конструкции. Уберите междометия и неуместные оценки («It's so dramatic»), если они неуместны.

예시: I often feel tired when I have to walk long distances in bad weather, for example when it rains heavily and I get wet and cold.

제안: Отвечайте последовательно: озвучьте основное действие и добавьте одно-два дополнительных конкретных действия. Исправьте ошибки в словах и фразах («go to kitchen» → «go to the kitchen», «upset movie» → «a sad movie» или «a relaxing show»). Старайтесь использовать связки («then», «so») для плавности.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually make a mug of hot tea and then go to my room to watch a relaxing movie or listen to calm music.

제안: Дайте чёткий ответ (да/нет) и объясните причину кратко и грамотно. Избегайте двойных отрицаний и неверной лексики («miss my friend», «give a good a bad mood»). Укажите конкретную причину и, при желании, вариант поведения (например, предложить перенести встречу).

예시: No, I usually prefer not to go out when I'm tired because I don't want to bring a bad mood to my friends; I often suggest we meet another day instead.

× To be honest, at last time I really often feel tired because in the school I do a lot of things and when I go to home I feel tired.

✓ To be honest, recently I often feel tired because at school I do a lot of things and when I go home I feel exhausted.

The sentence uses incorrect time expression 'at last time' and mixes adverb placement. Use 'recently' for recent habitual action. 'In the school' should be 'at school' for general attendance. 'Go to home' is incorrect; say 'go home'. 'Really often' is awkward; 'often' alone is sufficient. Also choose a stronger adjective 'exhausted' for variety.

× I can, uh, feel tired when in the street was there raining with them.

✓ I can feel tired when it is raining in the street with them.

The original mixes past tense 'was' with a general present possibility 'can feel'. For habitual or general situations use present tense: 'it is raining'. Word order 'in the street was there raining' is incorrect; correct order is 'it is raining in the street'. Also clarify 'with them' if referring to being with friends; keep as 'with them' if intended.

× It's so dramatic I think.

✓ I think it's very dramatic.

Word order and emphasis is awkward. Place 'I think' after the clause or use 'I think it's' for natural speech. 'So dramatic' is acceptable colloquially but 'very dramatic' is more neutral.

× When I feel tired, I go to kitchen and pour a mug of hot tea and go to my room to watch a upset movie.

✓ When I feel tired, I go to the kitchen, pour a mug of hot tea, and go to my room to watch a sad movie.

Use definite article 'the kitchen' for a specific place in the home. 'Upset movie' is incorrect collocation; the correct adjective for causing sadness is 'sad'. Also add commas and parallel verb forms 'go', 'pour', 'go' — better to combine or vary to avoid repetition.

× To be honest, I think that I don't go out with miss my friend when I feel tired because I don't want to give a good a bad mood for my friend.

✓ To be honest, I don't go out with my friend when I feel tired because I don't want to put my friend in a bad mood.

'Miss my friend' is wrong here; likely intended 'miss my friend' or 'my friend' — use 'my friend' after 'with'. 'Give a good a bad mood' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'put someone in a bad mood' or 'give someone a bad mood'. Also omit the extra 'I think that' if stating preference; keep tense consistent.