Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons, and use linking words (e.g., because, so) correctly. Correct tense and reduce redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating 'stressed').

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. Because I have to attend school every day and manage a heavy workload, I usually feel mentally and physically drained by the afternoon.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two supporting details with correct linking words and punctuation. Avoid capitalizing mid-sentence and be specific about what makes evenings restful.

예시: I usually feel most tired in the evening, since it’s the end of a long day. During the day I often feel anxious from classes, so coming home in the evening lets me relax and unwind.

제안: Use accurate vocabulary and clear structure: state the main action, then explain why with specific details. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., 'cam', 'leashed') and grammatical errors. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually have a short nap or go to bed earlier. Napping for 20–30 minutes helps me feel refreshed, and sleeping longer after a busy day makes me more comfortable and alert the next morning.

제안: Finish your sentence and give a clear reason. Use one or two specific reasons and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'socializing' instead of 'communicating'). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

예시: Usually no, I don’t go out when I’m tired, because socializing can be enjoyable but also exhausting after a long day. Instead, I prefer to stay at home alone to rest and recharge.

× Yes, I often feel tired because I have to go to school every day and it is very stressful for me so I was very stressed.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because I have to go to school every day and it is very stressful for me, so I am often very stressed.

The original mixes present habitual context with a past tense 'was very stressed'. Use present simple or present continuous to match 'I often feel' and 'have to go'. Change 'was' to 'am' to maintain consistent tense and meaning. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent within the sentence; when describing habitual situations use present simple (I feel, it is stressful, I am stressed).

× I feel tired in the evening because evening is the end of the day and During the day I feel nervous and in the evening I can come home and relax

✓ I feel tired in the evening because the evening is the end of the day, and during the day I feel nervous, but in the evening I can come home and relax.

Errors include capitalization of 'During', missing article before 'evening', run-on sentence and lack of contrast connector. Use 'the evening' and lowercase 'during'. Add commas and 'but' to show contrast between daytime nervousness and evening relaxation. Maintain present simple tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use articles with specific times (the evening), lowercase non-initial words, and join clauses with appropriate conjunctions or punctuation.

× I try to sleep for a long time because it is very relaxed time for me and sleeping cam makes me leashed and it is very comfortable.

✓ I try to sleep for a long time because it is a very relaxing time for me, and sleeping can make me relaxed and comfortable.

Multiple issues: 'relaxed time' is incorrect adjective form; use 'relaxing'. 'cam' is a typo for 'can'. 'leashed' is wrong word; likely intended 'relaxed'. Use 'relaxed' and 'comfortable' to describe feelings. Maintain gerund 'sleeping' followed by modal 'can' and adjective 'relaxed'. Suggestion: Use correct -ing adjectives (relaxing), proofread for typos, and choose appropriate adjectives to describe feelings.

× No, I don't because communicating with my friend is very fun but sometimes it is less less full for me. So I want to be in solo in my house when I

✓ No, I don't because communicating with my friends is very fun, but sometimes it is less fulfilling for me. So I want to be alone in my house when I am tired.

Problems: 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' if referring generally; 'less less full' is incorrect and likely 'less fulfilling'; 'be in solo' is ungrammatical—use 'be alone'; sentence was incomplete, add 'when I am tired' for clarity and tense consistency. Maintain present simple and adjective 'fulfilling'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements, choose correct adjectives ('fulfilling'), use 'alone' for solitude, and finish the sentence to convey complete idea.