Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'exhausted' not 'exhausting'), and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I work night shifts that disrupt my sleep schedule. As a result, I feel exhausted the next day and find it hard to concentrate at work.

제안: Good structure and a clear example. Improve by using a linking word for coherence and slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g. 'fatigued' or 'drowsy') and avoid repeating 'exhausted'.

예시: I usually feel tired after a long night shift because I must stay awake while others sleep. For instance, when I drive home early in the morning, I become drowsy and sometimes struggle to concentrate on the road.

제안: Remove filler words (uh), correct grammar (e.g. 'helps' -> 'help', 'stay' -> 'stay'), and combine ideas into two clear sentences with a linking word. Add a specific detail about timing or amount.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee or black tea because caffeine helps me stay alert. For example, I often have a cup before a night shift or a long solo work session.

제안: Be concise and correct verb forms ('invite' not 'invites'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific condition for going out. Avoid asking questions in your answer; instead state your preference and negotiation clearly.

예시: I usually prefer to stay home and rest when I'm tired because I need to recharge. However, if my friends invite me in advance, I might go out but ask them to choose another day or plan something low-key on the weekend.

× Yes, I do even feel tired because I usually do night shifts and the regular schedule disrupts my sleep patterns.

✓ Yes, I do; I even feel tired because I usually work night shifts and the irregular schedule disrupts my sleep patterns.

Multiple issues: 'do night shifts' is unnatural — use 'work night shifts' (verb choice; treated as present tense verb usage). 'Regular schedule' contradicts meaning; 'irregular schedule' fits. Added semicolon for clarity. Suggestion: use 'work night shifts' and choose 'irregular' to describe varying hours. Grammar problem types: 6:Present tense issue; 11:Incorrect use of prepositions/verb choice; 13:Incorrect use of adjectives.

× As a result, I frequently feel exhausting and hard to concentrate the next day.

✓ As a result, I frequently feel exhausted and find it hard to concentrate the next day.

'Feel exhausting' is incorrect because 'exhausting' describes something that causes tiredness; use the adjective 'exhausted' to describe the person's state. Also add 'find it' before 'hard to concentrate' to create a natural structure. Suggestion: use 'exhausted' for subject feelings and include 'find it' for readability.

× I often feel tired after a long night shift because I have to stay awake when most people are sleeping.

✓ I often feel tired after a long night shift because I have to stay awake when most people are sleeping.

Sentence is grammatically correct and fits present tense description of habitual action. No change needed.

× For example, when I drive home in the early morning, I feel exhausted and sometimes struggle to concentrate on the road.

✓ For example, when I drive home in the early morning, I feel exhausted and sometimes struggle to concentrate on the road.

Sentence is grammatically correct and consistent in present tense; no change needed.

× Uh, when I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee or black tea to helps me concentrate or stays awake.

✓ Uh, when I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee or black tea to help me concentrate or stay awake.

Subject-verb agreement in infinitive: after 'to' the base form should be used, so use 'help' and 'stay', not 'helps' or 'stays'. This is a verb form issue with verb + base (treated under verb + -ing/infinitive category). Suggestion: use base verbs after 'to'. Grammar problem types: 8:Verb + -ing form (applies to infinitive/base form usage); 27:Subject-verb agreement.

× Uh, for example, I uh, before go to work or alone work sessions, I drink a cup of coffee.

✓ Uh, for example, before I go to work or during solitary work sessions, I drink a cup of coffee.

Problems: missing subject 'I' before 'go' (sentence structure/subject-verb agreement) and awkward phrase 'alone work sessions' should be 'solitary work sessions' or 'working alone' and word order improved. Suggestion: include subject before verb and use natural collocation 'solitary work sessions' or 'when working alone'. Grammar problem types: 26:Sentence structure errors; 11:Incorrect use of prepositions/phrases.

× Let me stay alert.

✓ It helps me stay alert.

Original imperative 'Let me stay alert' sounds like a request to be allowed to stay alert; speaker likely means 'It helps me stay alert.' Change to a clear declarative sentence. Suggestion: use 'It helps me stay alert.' for clarity.

× I prefer to stay at home and rest because I want to recharge myself.

✓ I prefer to stay at home and rest because I want to recharge.

'Recharge myself' is grammatical but redundant; native speakers usually say 'recharge' without the reflexive pronoun. Remove 'myself' for naturalness. Grammar problem type: 12 Incorrect use of pronouns (reflexive unnecessary).

× If my friends invites me in advance, I will try it but I will discuss with them.

✓ If my friends invite me in advance, I will try to go, but I will discuss it with them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' (plural) requires 'invite' not 'invites'. Also 'try it' is vague—use 'try to go'. Add 'it' after 'discuss' or rephrase 'discuss it with them' for correct verb complementation. Grammar problem types: 27:Subject-verb agreement; 26:Sentence structure errors.

× Could they arrange another day?

✓ Could they arrange another day?

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question asking about friends' ability to arrange another day. However, in context a more natural phrasing from the speaker would be 'Could we arrange another day?' or 'Could they arrange it for another day?' No grammatical correction required.

× On my weekends I will discuss with them.

✓ On the weekend, I will discuss it with them.

'On my weekends' is awkward; use 'On the weekend' or 'At the weekend'. Also include the object 'it' after 'discuss' for completeness. Tense 'will discuss' is acceptable for future arrangements. Suggestion: 'On the weekend, I will discuss it with them.'