Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Mejorar la claridad y la economía del mensaje: responde directamente y evita repeticiones. Añade una oración principal clara y una o dos oraciones de apoyo con detalles concretos (por ejemplo: por qué te cansas, qué haces para recuperarte). Usa conectores simples para coherencia.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I work full time and study in my spare time. In the afternoons I usually feel drained, so I make sure to rest on weekends and take short breaks during the day to recharge.

제안: Evita muletillas y oraciones incompletas; termina las ideas. Proporciona un motivo específico y usa un conector para relacionar las causas (por ejemplo: "because", "so"). Mantén la respuesta en 2–3 oraciones como máximo.

예시: I usually feel most tired in the afternoon when I get home from work because heat and humidity in summer make me feel sluggish. As a result, I often sit down for twenty minutes to rest before doing anything else.

제안: Organiza la respuesta con una oración principal y detalles de apoyo claros; corrige errores gramaticales (por ejemplo: "lie down", "scrolling" → "scroll on social media"). Compara brevemente dos opciones y concluye con tu preferencia usando un conector como "however" o "but".

예시: When I feel tired, I usually lie down for a short nap because it helps me recover quickly. Sometimes I scroll on social media, but taking a nap is generally more effective for restoring my energy.

× Yes, now that I'm working full time, I feel more tired in the afternoon. Plus I have to study when I have time. So I try to get my weekend and try to rest a little bit.

✓ Yes, now that I'm working full time, I feel more tired in the afternoon. Plus I have to study when I have time. So I try to take the weekend and rest a little bit.

The phrase 'get my weekend' is unnatural in English; 'take the weekend' or 'have the weekend off' is correct. Use 'rest a little bit' not 'try to rest a little bit' twice; reducing redundancy improves clarity. Suggestion: say 'So I try to take the weekend off and rest a little.'

× Generally I feel tired in the afternoon, umm, when I get home from my job, umm, I think summertime makes me feel more tired because outside is hot and.

✓ Generally I feel tired in the afternoon, umm, when I get home from my job. Umm, I think summertime makes me feel more tired because it is hot outside.

Sentence trailing with 'and' is incomplete and word order 'outside is hot' is unnatural; say 'it is hot outside.' Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: '...because it is hot outside.'

× Lately, the best thing that I do when I feel tired is go to bed and lay down.

✓ Lately, the best thing I do when I feel tired is to go to bed and lie down.

Use the infinitive 'to go' after 'is' for clarity or zero-infinitive 'is lie down' but 'to lie down' is correct. Also 'lay down' is incorrect here because 'lay' requires an object; the correct intransitive verb is 'lie down.' Suggestion: use 'to lie down.'

× Uh, sometimes I scrolling on social media, but I think, uh, getting a nap, it's much better umm, to go away.

✓ Uh, sometimes I scroll on social media, but I think taking a nap is much better than that.

After 'sometimes I' you need the base verb 'scroll' (not 'scrolling'). 'Getting a nap' is unnatural; use 'taking a nap.' 'It's much better to go away' is unclear; replace with 'much better than that' to compare. Suggestion: 'Sometimes I scroll on social media, but taking a nap is much better.'