Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix vocabulary errors (e.g., "low fitness", "go for a run", "many times").

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. I think this is because my fitness is low, so I try to exercise regularly. For example, I go for a run every morning to boost my energy and improve my stamina.

제안: Answer directly with a clear time frame, then give a specific reason and one supporting detail. Use correct vocabulary and linking words to avoid repetition (e.g., "when I wake up", "go for a run").

예시: I usually feel most tired when I wake up in the morning because I sleep poorly. Therefore, I go for a short run to increase my energy, which helps me feel more awake for the rest of the day.

제안: Give one specific activity and explain briefly why it helps, avoiding repetition. Use correct collocations (e.g., "play tennis", "do exercise", "improve my fitness"). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually play tennis because it gets my blood flowing and boosts my mood. Playing for 30–60 minutes helps me feel more energetic and improves my overall fitness.

× I think I have a low fitness so I I usually feel tired so I try to exercise many time.

✓ I think my fitness is low, so I usually feel tired and try to exercise many times.

The phrase 'have a low fitness' is unnatural; use 'my fitness is low' (adjective). 'Many time' is incorrect — countable plural must be 'many times'. Also remove duplicate 'I' and join clauses with correct conjunctions for fluency.

× When in the morning I usually go for a loan to improve my fitness.

✓ In the morning I usually go for a run to improve my fitness.

The word 'loan' is a wrong word; the correct noun is 'run'. Also word order should be 'In the morning I usually...' rather than 'When in the morning'. This fixes meaning and grammar.

× When I get up in the morning, I usually feel tired so to improve my energy, I usually go for a lung in the morning.

✓ When I get up in the morning, I usually feel tired, so to improve my energy I usually go for a run.

Replace 'lung' with correct noun 'run'. Remove redundant 'in the morning' repetition and use comma before coordinating conjunction 'so'. Preposition 'for' is correct with 'go for a run'.

× So I try to exercise many times or my day.

✓ So I try to exercise many times during my day.

Use 'during my day' to indicate within the day. 'Or my day' is incorrect. 'Many times' is acceptable quantifier but needs correct preposition.

× When I feel tired, I prefer to exercise many sports.

✓ When I feel tired, I prefer to do many sports or play different sports.

You cannot 'exercise sports'; use 'do' or 'play' with 'sports'. 'Many sports' is possible but 'do many sports' or 'play different sports' is more natural.

× These days I usually play tennis.

✓ These days I usually play tennis.

Sentence is correct; no article needed before 'tennis' because it is an uncountable sport noun. Included here to show this sentence is acceptable.

× It is a great way to improve my energy, improve my energy.

✓ It is a great way to improve my energy.

The phrase repeats 'improve my energy' unnecessarily. Remove the repetition to correct sentence structure and improve clarity.

× I try to improve my fitness, fitness to exercise.

✓ I try to improve my fitness by exercising.

The original repeats 'fitness' and uses awkward structure. Use 'by' plus gerund 'exercising' to express method: 'improve my fitness by exercising'.