Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは意味が明確で自然ですが、文法と流暢さにいくつかの問題があります。具体的には、文のつながりや語法（例: 'Sometimes staying late several times a week' は不完全な構文）を改善する必要があります。また、内容の重複を避け、語彙を少し多様化するとより良くなります。練習の際は、主題文をまず述べ、その後で接続詞（for example, therefore, so）を使って理由や対処法をつなげ、長すぎない文（最大5文）を意識してください。

예시: I often feel tired because I work long hours at the office. For example, I sometimes stay late several times a week, so I usually feel exhausted by the evening. To cope with this, I try to get extra sleep on weekends and take short walks during my breaks to refresh myself.

제안: 答えは具体的ですが、語法と表現の正確さに問題があります（'I don't sleep better the night before' は不自然）。代わりに具体的な時間表現や状況を示し、接続語で理由を明確にしてください。また、1つの主題文＋1〜2の支援文で簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I usually feel tired after a long day at work, especially if I have been standing or walking a lot. In addition, I feel exhausted when I haven't slept well the night before, which makes the whole day harder to get through.

제안: 答えは簡潔ですが、いくつかの語彙ミスと文法ミスがあるため意味が不明瞭です（'more cost' は誤用）。より明確な語彙（e.g., "more energetic", "refreshed"）を使い、なぜそれが効果的か短く理由を述べると良いです。さらに、もし可能なら他の対処法も1例挙げて幅を見せてください。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge because it helps me feel more energetic in the afternoon. I also drink a glass of water or go for a brief walk to wake myself up if I can't nap.

× Sometimes staying late several times a week so I often feel exhausted by the evening.

✓ Sometimes I stay late several times a week, so I often feel exhausted by the evening.

The original is a sentence fragment because it uses the present participle 'staying' without a subject and proper clause structure. Add the subject 'I' and use the simple present 'stay' to form a complete clause; join with a comma and 'so' to show the result. Suggestion: use full independent clauses (subject + verb) when connecting ideas with coordinating conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Also, I get exhausted when I don't sleep better the night before.

✓ Also, I get exhausted when I don't sleep well the night before.

The error is incorrect adverb choice: 'better' is comparative and needs a reference; the adverb 'well' correctly modifies the verb 'sleep'. Use 'sleep well' to indicate poor sleep quality. Suggestion: use 'well' (adverb) after 'sleep' to describe how you slept. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× When I feel tired I usually take a short nap to recharge because it helps me feel more cost in the afternoon.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge because it helps me feel more refreshed in the afternoon.

The word 'cost' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'refreshed' or 'recharged'. Replace with 'refreshed' to convey regained energy. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: choose an adjective that matches the intended meaning (e.g., 'refreshed' or 'energized'). Grammar problem type ID: 13