Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid redundant wording (e.g. “feel myself tired”), reduce hesitation, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also correct small grammar issues (use 'while' or 'and' and remove 'myself').

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I work and study at the same time. For example, I sometimes have a full workday and then study for five or six hours, so by the evening I feel exhausted.

제안: Give a complete, grammatically correct response with a clear topic sentence and a linked specific example. Avoid incomplete endings and correct phrasing like 'I feel myself' to 'I feel'. Use a linking phrase (e.g. 'for instance' or 'for example').

예시: I usually feel most tired before exams. For instance, last term I studied for six hours straight without any breaks, and by the end of the day I felt completely drained.

제안: Structure the answer with a topic sentence, then add coherent supporting details using linking words. Be slightly more specific about activities and avoid repetition (e.g. 'watch something, watch movies').

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a long nap first. Afterwards, I often take a day off to relax: for example, I might meet friends or my boyfriend, or stay home and watch a movie to recover.

× Yes, I feel myself tired quite often.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired.

'Feel myself tired' is incorrect English because 'feel' here is a linking verb describing a state and should not use a reflexive pronoun. Use the adjective directly after 'feel' (feel tired). Also move adverb 'often' to a natural position before the main verb for fluency.

× It happens when I work UMM and study at the same time.

✓ It happens when I work at UMM and study at the same time.

Place the preposition 'at' before the name of an institution or workplace ('work at UMM'). Without the preposition the sentence is ungrammatical.

× Sometimes I am busy with uh my work schedule and sometimes I study for 5-6 hours, so I feel exhausted in the evening.

✓ Sometimes I am busy with my work schedule and sometimes I study for 5–6 hours, so I feel exhausted in the evening.

This sentence mainly has a filler 'uh' which should be removed in written form. The tense usage is acceptable (present simple and present continuous). Use a dash or en dash for number range and remove the filler for clarity.

× The last time it happened when I studied for six hours without any break.

✓ The last time it happened was when I studied for six hours without any break.

This sentence needs a main verb for the clause 'The last time it happened...' Use 'was' to link the time reference to the following clause. The original omitted the linking verb, making the sentence ungrammatical.

× So at the end of the exams I feel myself

✓ So at the end of the exams I feel exhausted.

Again, 'feel myself' is incorrect; use an adjective after 'feel' to describe the state. The original sentence also ends abruptly and needs a complete predicate (e.g., 'exhausted').

× I usually sleep for several hours.

✓ I usually sleep for several hours.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present simple is appropriate to describe habitual action. No correction needed.

× Later I take a day off just to spend time with my friends, with my boyfriend, or I stay at home and watch something, watch movies.

✓ Later I take a day off to spend time with my friends or my boyfriend, or I stay at home and watch movies.

Use 'to spend' rather than 'just to spend' for concision and naturalness. Combine 'or' choices smoothly and remove redundancy ('watch something, watch movies' repeated). The present simple is appropriate for habitual actions.