Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise, correct grammar errors, and add a linking phrase. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly support it with one or two specific habits. Watch verb forms (e.g., "I'm" → "I’m", "stay" → "stayed" or better "stay") and articles.

예시: Not really — I rarely feel tired because I make sure to get at least eight hours of sleep and eat a balanced diet. For example, I avoid late-night snacks and include protein and vegetables in my meals, which helps me feel energetic during the day.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about the circumstances and avoid repetition. Use correct nouns (insomnia) and verb forms, and explain briefly why seasons affect you.

예시: I usually feel tired when the seasons change because sudden temperature shifts disturb my sleep. For instance, in spring my room becomes warmer at night, which makes it harder for me to fall asleep and leads to a few sleepless nights.

제안: Structure your answer: state the main strategy, then mention specific actions with linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and vague phrases. Prefer healthier remedies first and be specific about timing and amount (e.g., short walk, 10 minutes stretching).

예시: When I feel tired, I usually do light exercise to refresh myself. For example, I might do 10 minutes of stretching or a short brisk walk, and if I still need an energy boost I have one cup of coffee rather than energy drinks.

× I don't usually feel tired I will always make sure I have enough sleep and also I always eat healthy to make sure I'm stay awake ready for the day

✓ I don't usually feel tired. I always make sure I get enough sleep, and I also always eat healthily to make sure I stay awake and ready for the day.

This sentence has multiple issues: missing punctuation and sentence boundary (Sentence structure, but only article errors allowed? However primary problems are sentence structure and adverb/adjective use. According to the list, 'Article errors' (ID 22) is not ideal but we must pick listed types. Correction fixes run-on sentence by adding a period and commas, uses 'get enough sleep' instead of 'have enough sleep' for natural English, changes 'eat healthy' to the adverb 'eat healthily', and removes the extra 'I'm' before 'stay'. Suggestion: break long ideas into separate sentences, use adverbs to modify verbs, and watch for unnecessary contractions or extra words.

× Maybe I have not enough of sleep.

✓ Maybe I don't have enough sleep.

The original uses an incorrect construction 'have not enough of sleep'. Correct English uses 'don't have enough sleep' or 'don't get enough sleep'. Suggestion: use the negative auxiliary 'do not' plus base verb and the noun 'sleep' without 'of'.

× I usually have the problem when the season change.

✓ I usually have the problem when the seasons change.

The noun 'season' should be plural because seasonal changes happen generally; the verb 'change' should agree with plural 'seasons'. Suggestion: use plural for general repeated events: 'seasons change'.

× So when the season changes, I will tend to have a insomia like a sleepless night sometimes because of the temperature changing and my body react differently.

✓ So when the season changes, I tend to have insomnia, like a sleepless night sometimes, because of the temperature change and my body reacts differently.

Errors: 'a insomia' uses incorrect article and misspelling; 'insomia' -> 'insomnia'; 'have a insomnia' should be 'have insomnia' (uncountable). 'I will tend to have' is awkward, present simple 'I tend to have' fits habitual meaning. 'temperature changing' better as 'temperature change'. 'my body react' needs third person singular 'reacts'. Suggestion: use correct spelling, correct articles with uncountable nouns, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So I sometimes will just like have a sleepless night.

✓ So sometimes I will just have a sleepless night.

The filler 'like' is unnecessary in formal speech. Word order 'So I sometimes will' is awkward; 'sometimes I will just' is more natural. Suggestion: avoid filler words and place adverbs of frequency (sometimes) before the auxiliary verb for clarity.

× I will try to do some light exercise or like stretching, do some a little bit yoga to stay awake or try to drink coffee and some energy drinks as well so I always try to distract myself to do something else not doing the things that I'm on so when we feel

✓ I try to do some light exercise or stretching, do a little yoga to stay awake, or drink coffee and energy drinks. I also try to distract myself by doing something else instead of the task I'm working on when I feel tired.

Multiple issues: tense consistency (use present simple for habitual actions), extra 'like' filler, wrong article 'do some a little bit yoga' should be 'do a little yoga' or 'a little bit of yoga', and unclear ending. Also 'not doing the things that I'm on' is incorrect; corrected to 'instead of the task I'm working on'. Suggestion: use simple parallel structures for lists, remove unnecessary fillers, use correct articles with 'little', and complete sentence meanings.