Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and incorrect word choices. Give a direct topic sentence, then one concise supporting detail. Use correct verb forms and precise vocabulary (e.g., "feel tired", "after long meetings"). Keep it to 1–2 sentences and avoid extra words.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after long meetings at the office. After back-to-back meetings I usually feel mentally drained and need a short break to recover.

제안: The answer is largely incoherent and does not directly address the question. Start with a clear topic sentence saying when you feel tired, then give one specific reason with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Use correct grammar and relevant vocabulary (e.g., "long hours", "lack of sleep", "heavy workload").

예시: I usually feel tired at the end of a long workday because I spend many hours focusing on tasks. For example, when I work late and skip breaks, my energy drops and I struggle to concentrate.

제안: Your response mixes unclear actions and odd phrases. Give a direct topic sentence about your usual strategy, then one or two specific activities with linking words (e.g., "usually", "sometimes"). Use natural verbs and expressions (e.g., "go for a walk", "relax at home", "listen to music").

예시: When I feel tired, I usually go for a short walk to get fresh air and clear my head. Sometimes I stay at home, make a cup of tea and listen to relaxing music to unwind.

× Yes, I often see higher especially if I had some meeting at office.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially if I have a meeting at the office.

The student used incorrect verbs and tenses: 'see higher' is meaningless here and should be 'feel tired'. 'Had' is past tense but sentence describes habitual situations, so present simple 'have' is correct. Also add the article 'the' before 'office'. Use: 'I often feel tired, especially if I have a meeting at the office.' Suggestions: replace incorrect verbs with 'feel tired', use present simple for habitual actions, and include correct articles.

× if I had a lot of nutrients in my grands would grain my energy any time I And I'm to me doctor if I have to focus on our work

✓ If I don't get enough nutrients, my energy drops and I find it hard to focus on my work.

The original sentence has many errors: wrong vocabulary ('grands', 'grain'), incorrect conditional and tense mixing, and unclear pronouns. The intended meaning is a habitual conditional, so use present simple for the condition: 'If I don't get enough nutrients'. Use present simple result 'my energy drops' and 'I find it hard to focus on my work.' Also correct pronouns ('my work') and remove irrelevant phrases about doctor. Suggestions: use clear vocabulary ('nutrients', 'energy drops'), keep tense consistent for real conditions, and use correct pronouns.

× if I had a lot of nutrients in my grands would grain my energy any time I And I'm to me doctor if I have to focus on our work

✓ If I have enough nutrients, I have more energy and can focus better on my work.

An alternative clearer correction: the original mixes conditional forms. For a general truth use present simple in both clauses: 'If I have enough nutrients, I have more energy and can focus better.' Fix pronouns to 'my work.' Suggestions: choose present simple for habitual cause-effect, and simplify structure.

× I often go out for walk or specifically make me unwear and pierce my hair, but sometimes I start to stay at home, make a cup of tea and listen to music on YouTube if I

✓ I often go out for a walk or do things like unwind and fix my hair, but sometimes I stay at home, make a cup of tea and listen to music on YouTube.

Errors include missing article 'a' before 'walk', incorrect verbs 'make me unwear' (should be 'unwind') and 'pierce my hair' (likely 'fix my hair' or 'do my hair'), and unfinished sentence ending. Use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('go for a walk', 'unwind', 'do my hair'), include articles, and finish the sentence.