Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 返答は直接的で理由を述べていますが、文法と語順、語彙の選択に改善が必要です。具体的には時制（"recently I feel"→"I've been feeling"）、前置詞（"for daily life"は不自然）、語の重複と冗長性（"I have to study hard so I feel overwhelmed for studying and"のような重複）を直しましょう。5文以内で簡潔にまとめ、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いです。例：まず主張を述べ、次に理由を1文で補足し、必要なら短い追加情報を付け加えてください。

예시: Yes, I've been feeling quite tired recently because I'm preparing for exams next year. Studying long hours every day leaves me mentally exhausted. I try to take short breaks to stay focused.

제안: 答えは概ね意味が通じますが、語順と表現を自然に整え、具体性を増してください。例えば「どんな時か分からない」は曖昧なので避け、具体的な時間や状況（夜、寝る前、仕事や勉強の後）を示しましょう。接続語を使って文を滑らかに繋げ、最大5文に収めてください。

예시: I usually feel most tired at night, just before going to bed. At that time I often replay the day's events in my head, which makes me feel mentally drained. After long study sessions I also notice increased tiredness.

제안: 内容は良く、具体例もありますが文法と流暢さを改善しましょう。現在形・進行形の使い分け（"I always listening"→"I always listen"または"I usually listen"）、繰り返しの語（"when I when I"）を直すこと。接続語で理由を明確にし、語彙を少し多様にすると更に良くなります。

예시: I usually listen to my favourite music when I'm tired. For example, I prefer classical music because its steady rhythm helps me relax and clear my mind. Listening for twenty minutes usually calms me down.

× Yes, I recently feel tired for daily life because I have entered exams next year and I have to study hard so I feel overwhelmed for studying and.

✓ Yes, I have recently been feeling tired in my daily life because I will take exams next year and I have to study hard, so I feel overwhelmed by studying.

The original uses present simple 'feel' with 'recently' which requires present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have recently been feeling' or 'have recently felt') to show a recent change. 'for daily life' is incorrect preposition and phrase; use 'in my daily life'. 'I have entered exams' is unnatural; use 'I will take exams next year' or 'I am taking exams next year'. 'overwhelmed for studying' should be 'overwhelmed by studying'. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× I'm not sure the occasions, but. Before going to bed, I always remember the day, so this moment makes me feel tired.

✓ I'm not sure on which occasions I feel tired, but before going to bed I always replay the day in my mind, and that makes me feel tired.

The fragment 'I'm not sure the occasions, but.' is incomplete and needs a preposition and object: 'not sure on which occasions'. 'Remember the day' is awkward; use 'replay the day in my mind'. 'so this moment makes me feel tired' is wordy; use 'and that makes me feel tired'. Overall sentence structure needed reordering to be grammatical and natural.

× I always listening to my favorite music when I when I feel tired.

✓ I always listen to my favorite music when I feel tired.

The continuous form 'listening' is incorrect after 'always' when referring to habitual action; use the base verb 'listen'. There is also a repeated phrase 'when I' which must be removed. For habitual routines, simple present tense is appropriate.

× For example, I'm into uh, classical music because the rhythm is very suitable for me.

✓ For example, I'm into classical music because the rhythm is very suitable for me.

Removing the filler 'uh,' improves fluency but is not a grammar error. The sentence itself is grammatical; article usage is correct. No article change needed. (Listed here to confirm no article error.)

× It makes me calm.

✓ It calms me.

'It makes me calm' is understandable but less natural; 'It calms me' is more idiomatic. This changes word order and uses a verb that directly expresses the effect. The pronoun 'it' remains subject and 'me' is the object, which is correct.