Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No), then give one or two brief supporting details. Correct verb forms and remove repetition.

예시: No, I don't often feel tired. I usually sleep for eight hours and do a short workout every morning, which helps me stay energetic throughout the day.

제안: Give a clear, single reason and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid contradictory statements. State when and why you feel tired, with one specific example.

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening after a long workday because my job is busy and requires constant concentration. For example, after eight hours of meetings and computer work I feel mentally drained by 9 p.m.

제안: Give a clear sequence: state the main activity and explain the effect using correct verb forms. Avoid repeating the same point and correct word choice (e.g., relieve stress, not make stress).

예시: When I'm tired I usually lie down and watch a light comedy to relax. Watching something funny helps me forget work-related stress and improves my mood, so I often feel much better afterwards.

× Actually I always take 8 hours of sleep and I always done my exercise after waking up at early in the morning, so I I not often feel tired.

✓ Actually I always get eight hours of sleep and I always do my exercise after waking up early in the morning, so I do not often feel tired.

Multiple present-tense errors: 'take 8 hours of sleep' is acceptable but 'get eight hours of sleep' is more natural; use words for numbers under ten in formal writing. 'done my exercise' incorrectly uses past participle instead of simple present 'do my exercise' for habitual actions. 'at early in the morning' has wrong preposition and word order; use 'early in the morning'. 'I I not often feel tired' is missing auxiliary verb and has a repeated pronoun; use 'I do not often feel tired'. Suggest practicing subject-verb forms for habitual actions (simple present) and correct word order for time expressions.

× I mostly feel tired at night because after whole working day is an hectic routine.

✓ I mostly feel tired at night because the whole working day is a hectic routine.

The sentence has a missing article and awkward structure. 'after whole working day is an hectic routine' is ungrammatical. Remove 'after' or rephrase the clause; adding the definite article 'the' before 'whole working day' and using 'a hectic routine' fixes articles and noun phrase. The corrected sentence uses simple present to describe a habitual reason.

× I feel tired at night every time I can't feel tired because the time of working I do not understand that I'm tired or not.

✓ I feel tired at night. While I am working during the day, I often do not realize that I am tired, so I only notice it in the evening.

Original is confused and lacks clear clause structure and correct tense/auxiliary usage. 'every time I can't feel tired because the time of working' is unclear. Split into two sentences and use present continuous 'am working' for ongoing daytime activity and present simple 'do not realize' for habitual inability to notice tiredness. Use 'notice' rather than 'feel' to clarify meaning and include proper subject-verb agreement and auxiliaries ('do not realize', 'I am tired').

× Whenever I feel tired I go to my bed and lay down and watch a comedy movie.

✓ Whenever I feel tired I go to bed, lie down, and watch a comedy movie.

Use 'go to bed' not 'go to my bed' for the general action. 'Lay down' is incorrect because 'lay' requires an object; the correct intransitive verb is 'lie down'. Maintain parallel verb forms in the list: 'go', 'lie', 'watch'. Keep simple present for habitual actions.

× So it makes me relax and feel calm and it also makes umm stress.

✓ So it helps me relax and feel calm, and it also reduces my stress.

'makes me relax' is unnatural; use 'helps me relax'. 'Makes umm stress' is ungrammatical—'reduces my stress' conveys the intended meaning. Use appropriate verbs with nouns ('reduce stress') and include possessive 'my' for clarity.

× It also relieve my stress so it makes me feel better.

✓ It also relieves my stress, so it makes me feel better.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'It' requires 'relieves' (third person singular). The original used base verb 'relieve'. Add comma before coordinating conjunction 'so' for clarity. Use present simple for habitual effects.