Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit long and repetitive ("honestly" and "to be honest"). Improve by giving one strong reason and a brief supporting detail. Use one topic sentence then one supporting detail; avoid redundancy and check grammar (e.g. "workload at my office", "health is not great").

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I have a heavy workload at my office. For example, I usually work late three times a week, which leaves me with little time to rest.

제안: The answer is confusing and has grammatical errors and unclear time references ("afternoons tonight"). Organise the reply: give a clear topic sentence about when you feel tired and one or two specific details. Use linking words (e.g. "especially", "however"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually feel most tired in the morning when I wake up, especially after sleepless nights. I also get quite exhausted in the late afternoon, so I often need a short rest before dinner.

제안: Good points but the answer is informal and slightly disorganised. Start with a direct topic sentence ("I usually..."), then give 1–2 specific actions with brief reasons. Correct small grammar issues ("take saline" → "have a saline drip" is clinical; better say "drink water" or "have a snack").

예시: When I feel tired, I usually have a light snack and drink plenty of water, then rest for about 20–30 minutes. However, I often can’t recover fully because I need to finish household chores after work.

× Yes, I honestly feel drained every day because the heavy workload in my office and to be honest my health condition is not at the top right now.

✓ Yes, I honestly feel drained every day because of the heavy workload at my office and, to be honest, my health is not at its best right now.

The sentence uses incorrect or missing prepositions: 'because the heavy workload' should be 'because of the heavy workload' to show cause; 'in my office' is acceptable but 'at my office' is more natural for workplace context. Also the phrase 'my health condition is not at the top' is unnatural; using 'my health is not at its best' is clearer. Add commas around 'to be honest' as it is a parenthetical phrase. Suggestions: use 'because of' to show cause, choose 'at' for workplace, and use an idiomatic phrase for health status. (English (Bangladesh))

× I feel tired all day long during the morning when I wake up, and I feel a little tired during the noon, I guess.

✓ I feel tired all morning when I wake up, and I feel a little tired around noon, I guess.

Redundant and incorrect time expressions: 'all day long during the morning' is contradictory; use 'all morning' for the morning period. 'During the noon' is incorrect; 'around noon' or 'at noon' is correct. Keep present simple tense consistent. Suggestion: simplify time phrases to 'all morning' and 'around noon.' (English (Bangladesh))

× But in the afternoons tonight I feel really. Be exhausted.

✓ But in the afternoons I feel really exhausted.

The original has fragmented and conflicting phrases: 'afternoons tonight' mixes plural 'afternoons' with 'tonight' and creates confusion. 'I feel really. Be exhausted.' is a sentence fragment and incorrect verb form. Combine into one complete sentence: 'I feel really exhausted.' Use either 'in the afternoons' (habitual) or 'tonight' (specific); here 'in the afternoons' matches the rest of the response. Suggestion: remove 'tonight' and join fragments into a single clause with correct verb placement. (English (Bangladesh))

× What can I do when I feel tired? I try to eat and take a saline or two maybe and rest, Mostly rest but I do not have proper time to recover fully because I have so many works to do when I get home from work.

✓ What can I do when I feel tired? I try to eat and take a saline or two, and rest—mostly rest—but I do not have enough time to recover fully because I have so much work to do when I get home from work.

Several issues: punctuation and capitalization need fixing. 'take a saline' is colloquial but acceptable; add commas. 'Mostly rest' should be lowercase and connected to the previous clause. 'Proper time' is better as 'enough time.' 'so many works' is incorrect: 'work' as an uncountable noun should be 'so much work.' Modal use is okay, but sentence flow and quantifier use are wrong. Suggestion: use 'enough time' and 'so much work,' fix punctuation and capitalization to make sentence grammatically correct. (English (Bangladesh))