Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, rồi nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp/thiếu từ. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so). Tránh từ lặp và sửa lỗi phát âm/từ sai (ví dụ: "entertainment team" không phù hợp).

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. I go to school early and study late into the night, so I usually feel exhausted by the evening. Because of this schedule, I plan to adjust my routine by going to bed earlier and reducing late-night studying. For example, I will set a fixed study period and take short breaks to relax.

제안: Câu trả lời cần cụ thể hơn và chính xác ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (When I feel tired), rồi giải thích nguyên nhân với chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh câu mơ hồ ("memorizing people") và dùng từ đúng nghĩa. Sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "when" để rõ ràng hơn.

예시: I usually feel tired late at night, just before going to bed. This happens because I often replay the day's events in my mind and worry about things I haven't finished. As a result, I find it hard to relax and fall asleep.

제안: Câu trả lời cần tổ chức rõ ràng, dùng thì và động từ đúng, tránh từ sai hoặc không phù hợp (ví dụ: "looking for your novels", "When washing their love"). Nên nêu hoạt động cụ thể, lý do vì sao giúp thư giãn và đưa ví dụ. Giữ trong tối đa 5 câu và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually read novels or watch Chinese movies to relax. These activities help me forget stress and calm my mind after a long day. For example, watching a light comedy makes me laugh and fall asleep more easily.

× To be honest, every day I go to school early and have to study until late night, it makes me feel very uncomfortable and tired too.

✓ To be honest, I go to school early every day and have to study until late at night, which makes me feel very uncomfortable and tired.

This sentence contains a run-on structure and awkward word order. The clauses should be connected properly using a relative pronoun like which to refer to the whole preceding clause. Also, the adverbial phrase 'every day' is more natural after the verb phrase, and the fixed expression is 'late at night'. Suggestion: split into two sentences or use a relative clause: 'I go to school early every day and have to study until late at night, which makes me feel very uncomfortable and tired.'

× So if I have a chance I will change my harmful habit, like uh, adjust. Schedule or replace our My Entertain Entertainment team.

✓ So if I have a chance, I will change my harmful habits, for example by adjusting my schedule or replacing my entertainment activities.

This sentence has multiple issues: run-on fragments, wrong word choice, and inconsistent nouns. 'Habit' should be plural if referring to more than one habit. 'Adjust. Schedule' is fragmented and needs 'adjusting my schedule'. 'Replace our My Entertain Entertainment team' is unintelligible; likely intended 'replace my entertainment activities'. Suggestion: use parallel gerund phrases: 'by adjusting my schedule or replacing my entertainment activities.'

× I often feel tired in the late night, the time before I sleep, because I always think about that day, about the memorizing people.

✓ I often feel tired late at night, before I go to sleep, because I always think about the day and try to remember people.

Use the idiomatic expression 'late at night' rather than 'in the late night'. 'The time before I sleep' is more naturally 'before I go to sleep'. 'Memorizing people' is incorrect; likely meant 'trying to remember people' or 'remembering people'. Also maintain present simple tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'I often feel tired late at night before I go to sleep because I always think about the day and try to remember people.'

× When I feel exhausted, I always looking for your novels and Chinese movies, you know, this type of entertainment are the ways that I entertainment and unwind after a long day, and I also feel lovely.

✓ When I feel exhausted, I always look for novels and Chinese movies; this type of entertainment is how I relax and unwind after a long day, and it makes me feel happy.

After 'I always' the base form of the verb should be used: 'I always look', not 'I always looking' (present simple). 'Your novels' is incorrect in context; should be 'novels'. 'This type of entertainment are' is wrong agreement; use 'is' for singular 'type'. 'Entertainment' as a verb is wrong here; use 'relax' or 'unwind'. 'Lovely' is an adjective that doesn't collocate well with 'feel' in this context; 'happy' or 'relaxed' is better. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement: 'I always look for novels and Chinese movies; this type of entertainment is how I relax and unwind.'

× When washing their love, which is my wishes.

✓ When watching them, which is my wish.

This fragment is unclear and ungrammatical. 'When washing their love' is nonsensical; likely intended 'watching them' (the movies or shows). 'Which is my wishes' has number mismatch and article errors; use singular 'which is my wish' or better integrate into previous sentence: '...and watching them is what I wish.' Suggestion: rewrite complete thought and use correct verb and noun forms.