Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp vào câu hỏi, tránh lạc đề và câu dài lủng củng. Hãy dùng 1 câu chủ đề ngắn gọn nêu có hay không thường mệt, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu giải thích cụ thể nguyên nhân. Tránh những cụm từ không rõ nghĩa và lỗi ngữ pháp. Sử dụng liên từ cơ bản (because, so, and) để nối ý và giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I have many responsibilities. For example, preparing for my final exams and looking for a job makes me very tired. Because of these tasks, I sometimes feel stressed and lack sleep.

제안: Trả lời cần rõ ràng về thời điểm cụ thể và dùng cấu trúc câu mạch lạc. Nên nêu thời điểm (e.g. in the evening, during exam period) và giải thích ngắn gọn nguyên nhân kèm ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh dùng từ không đúng (ví dụ: exalted) và sắp xếp từ theo trật tự chính xác. Giữ tối đa 3 câu để tự nhiên.

예시: I usually feel tired during the exam period and in the evenings after long study sessions. For instance, when I study for hours and also work on job applications, I become exhausted. The long continuous hours of concentration make me feel drained.

제안: Cần nêu hành động cụ thể bạn làm khi mệt và giải thích tại sao nó giúp bạn. Dùng động từ và cụm từ chuẩn (e.g. hang out with friends, watch movies, take a nap, exercise). Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh câu dài lộn xộn. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually hang out with my friends or watch a movie to relax. These activities help me forget stress and let my mind and body rest. Sometimes I also take a short nap to recharge.

× Well for math I feel really tired because I have a lot of things to do like finding a job or join my final exam and it makes me feel really comfortable to wear and it relaxed for our wives but

✓ Well, for my studies I often feel really tired because I have a lot of things to do, such as finding a job or preparing for my final exam, and it makes me feel uncomfortable and stressed.

The original sentence contains multiple sentence structure problems: run-on clauses, incorrect verb forms ('join my final exam' should be 'prepare for my final exam'), and contradictory words ('comfortable to wear' and 'relaxed for our wives' are incoherent). Suggestions: split ideas into clauses with commas and conjunctions, use correct collocations (prepare for an exam, feel uncomfortable, feel stressed), and keep the subject consistent. Grammar problem type and ID: 26.

× I often feel tired because I'm busy preparing for my final exam looking for a job. The long hours of studying job application making those set and exalted.

✓ I often feel tired because I'm busy preparing for my final exam and looking for a job. The long hours of studying and filling out job applications make me exhausted.

Errors: missing conjunction to join parallel gerunds ('preparing... and looking'), and incorrect noun forms and verb agreement in the second sentence ('job application' should be plural or phrased, and 'making those set and exalted' is ungrammatical). Suggest: use parallel structure with 'and', pluralize/count nouns as needed, and use appropriate adjective 'exhausted' to describe result. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('The long hours ... make'). Grammar problem type and ID: 26.

× When I feel tired, I often like find or something today.

✓ When I feel tired, I often like to find something to do.

The error is incorrect verb pattern after 'like'. In English, 'like' can be followed by the gerund or to-infinitive; here the intended meaning requires 'like to find' or 'like finding'. Also 'or something today' is awkward — 'something to do' is clearer. Suggest using 'like to find something to do' or 'like finding something to do'. Grammar problem type and ID: 8.

× For example, when I hang out with my friend or watching movies that's the most thing I want to prefer today is a good thing because when I'm swept in my body can relax and my mind too

✓ For example, when I hang out with my friends or watch movies, that's what I prefer because when I am worn out my body and mind can relax.

Multiple issues: inconsistent verb forms in a coordinate structure ('hang out' vs 'watching') — use parallel forms ('hang out' and 'watch'). 'Most thing I want to prefer today' is ungrammatical; use 'that's what I prefer'. 'Swept in my body' is incorrect preposition/collocation; the intended meaning is 'worn out' or 'exhausted'. Suggest using correct prepositions and collocations: 'when I am worn out' and 'my body and mind can relax'. Grammar problem type and ID: 11