Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thời gian, tần suất hoặc ví dụ hoàn chỉnh). Tránh câu bị cắt ngang và lỗi ngữ pháp như “work a part”. Thêm vài liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc (e.g., because, so).

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I juggle university exams and a part-time job. For example, last week I had three exams and worked two evening shifts, so I was completely exhausted.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm nội bộ (‘umm’) và từ sai (e.g., “re chair”, “relative”). Nên tách thành câu chủ đề rõ ràng: khi nào cảm thấy mệt, sau đó nêu biện pháp cụ thể kèm liên từ. Dùng thì phù hợp và sửa lỗi từ vựng (recharge, relaxed).

예시: I usually feel tired at the end of a long day at work or after studying for hours. To recover, I take a short break and do relaxing activities such as reading or listening to music to recharge my energy.

제안: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng cần chọn từ chính xác hơn (e.g., “rejoice” không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh), dùng số ít/quá nhiều phù hợp (sometime → sometimes). Nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và thêm 1 chi tiết cụ thể (nơi đi dạo, loại sách hoặc tần suất gặp bạn). Giữ độ dài ≤5 câu.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually go for a short walk in the park or read a novel to relax. Sometimes I meet up with friends and we chat about our day, which helps me feel much better.

× Yes, I often feel tired because I have many university exams and work long hours which make me feel tired, exhausted and under pressure.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because I have many university exams and work long hours, which make me feel tired, exhausted, and under pressure.

Comma needed before 'which' to introduce a non-restrictive relative clause; add serial comma for clarity. No tense change required; improve punctuation to clarify clause boundaries.

× For example, last week I had to work a part.

✓ For example, last week I had to work a part-time shift.

Original sentence is incomplete and vague. 'Work a part' is not idiomatic. Replace with 'work a part-time shift' to specify the kind of work. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× I often feel tired at the end of long working hour, taking a short break or doing something that relax me like umm reading or listening to music help me re chair my energy so I can be more relative later.

✓ I often feel tired at the end of long working hours. Taking a short break or doing something that relaxes me, like reading or listening to music, helps me recharge my energy so I can be more productive later.

Several issues corrected: 'working hour' should be plural 'working hours' (singular/plural); verb agreement 'relax me' -> 'relaxes me' (third person singular); missing subject-verb agreement 'help me' -> 'helps me'; 're chair' is incorrect, use 'recharge'; 'relative' wrong word, use 'productive' or 'refreshed'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× When I feel tired I usually go for a walk or read to relax and rejoice.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually go for a walk or read to relax and unwind.

Added comma after introductory clause. 'Rejoice' is not appropriate in this context; use 'unwind' or 'relax' to convey resting. Verb tenses were fine.

× Sometime I meet up my friends so I can talk about my day and feel better.

✓ Sometimes I meet up with my friends so I can talk about my day and feel better.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (frequency adverb). 'Meet up my friends' is incorrect; use 'meet up with my friends' to include the preposition 'with'. This corrects adverb form and pronoun/preposition use.