Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答题要更直接并用正确时态与句型，避免重复并给出具体信息。可先给出主题句（是否经常感到疲劳），然后用一到两句具体原因支持，使用连词如 because, and, also。注意主谓一致和词形（例如 “I often feel tired”，“I have an underlying health condition”）。整体答案不要超过五句。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. The main reason is an underlying health condition that makes me feel weak, and secondly my job is quite stressful, which reduces my energy. Because of these factors, I frequently need more rest.

제안: 回答要清晰说明具体情境并用适当的时间表达与结果词，避免口头填充词。使用连接词（for example, when, if）并把感受和后果描述清楚。修正错误词汇（例如 “feel a little tired”，“feel uncomfortable and want to rest”）。

예시: I usually feel tired when I study for long periods. For example, if I study for more than two hours I start to feel a bit tired, and after three to four continuous hours I often feel uncomfortable and need to take a break to rest.

제안: 回答结构较好，但需减少口头语并提高表达准确性与多样性。先给主题句，然后列出一到两个常用应对方法并解释效果，用连接词如 if, or, also。避免不必要的模糊词（maybe）。例如说“lie in bed to rest”或“take a short walk to relax and improve circulation”。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually lie down to rest for a short time if possible. If I cannot lie down, I take a short walk to relax and improve my circulation, and I often drink some water to rehydrate.

× Yes, I've also feel tired because I think the most reason is I have some basic disease.

✓ Yes, I also feel tired because I think the main reason is that I have some chronic health problems.

原句中“I've also feel tired”时态和助动词用法混乱。已完成时（I've）后面不能直接接动词原形“feel”；应使用一般现在时“I also feel tired”。“the most reason”是错误表达，应改为“the main reason”。“basic disease”不自然，改为“chronic health problems（慢性健康问题）”。建议：说现在的长期状态用一般现在时；用更自然的词组表达原因。

× And of course, I think the other reason is I have the, I have the work, which let me feel so pressure.

✓ And of course, I think the other reason is that I have a lot of work, which makes me feel very stressed.

原句中“the work”与上下文不匹配且重复“I have the, I have the work”；“let me feel so pressure”中代词和动词搭配错误，应为“which makes me feel very stressed”或“which makes me feel a lot of pressure”。建议：避免重复，使用正确的动词搭配（make sb feel + 名词/形容词）。

× MMM, if I study, uh, list, uh, more than two hours, I will stuff you a little tired.

✓ If I study for more than two hours, I will feel a little tired.

原句中“study, uh, list”不清楚，“for more than two hours”需要介词for表持续时间。“I will stuff you a little tired”语法完全错误：‘stuff you’不相关，应为“I will feel a little tired”。建议：表示持续时间用for；feel tired 用动词feel，不要插入无关词。

× And if I, uh, continually study three to four hours, umm, maybe I will feel so uncomfortable and want to table.

✓ And if I continually study for three to four hours, maybe I will feel very uncomfortable and want to lie down.

需要介词for表示时间段：“study for three to four hours”。“want to table”是不正确的表达，可能想说“想躺下”，应为“want to lie down”。“so uncomfortable”口语可改“very uncomfortable”。建议：关注介词for和正确的动词短语（lie down）。

× Uh, when I feel tired, if I can, I will lie in the bed, and if I cannot, I will umm, just umm, walk around to feel, to relax my breath and my body.

✓ When I feel tired, if I can, I will lie in bed; if I cannot, I will just walk around to relax my breathing and my body.

英文中常用短语是“lie in bed”而不是“lie in the bed”除非特指一张床。短语“relax my breath”不自然，改为“relax my breathing”。冗余逗顿（umm）在正式回答中应避免。建议：记住固定搭配（lie in bed, relax your breathing）。

× Maybe I will drink some water.

✓ Maybe I'll drink some water.

句子本身基本正确，但口语中收缩形式更自然：“I'll”代替“I will”。若需保持正式书面语，可保留“I will”。这里列为代词/形式选择问题，建议在口语中使用缩写使表达更地道。