Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意句子結構與語法，避免使用多個連接詞造成句子混亂。回答應先直接回答問題（是/否），然後用1–2個簡短句子說明原因或舉例。控制在最多5句內，並使用連接詞如“because”或“so”來保持邏輯連貫。

예시: Not often. I only feel tired when I work late or study for exams because I don't get enough sleep. For example, last month I stayed up late for a project and felt exhausted the next day.

제안: 答案有主題句並給出原因，但開頭的“While”使用不當，應直接陳述時間或情況，並用一兩個連接詞連接原因與結果，語句要更簡潔有力。可以補充更具體的細節如“for how long”或“what tasks”來增加內容豐富度。

예시: I usually feel tired when I work late at the office. I have to concentrate for many hours, which makes me exhausted, so I often go home and rest for a while. For instance, after three consecutive late nights I find it hard to focus.

제안: 避免開頭使用不必要的連接詞，並修正語法錯誤（例如“a few more a lot”）。回答應先說明習慣（主題句），再用1–2個具體例子說明 nap 的長度或其他替代做法，以增加清晰度與具體性。

예시: I usually take a short nap to recharge. For example, I sometimes sleep for 20 minutes in the afternoon, and other times I just sit quietly and listen to music to relax.

× While I sometimes feel tired but not often it's I usually feel tired when I work late or study for exams because I don't get enough sleep and last month I stayed up late for a project so I was very tired the next day.

✓ I sometimes feel tired, but not often. I usually feel tired when I work late or study for exams because I don't get enough sleep. Last month I stayed up late for a project, so I was very tired the next day.

句子包含多个并列或转折关系，但使用了不必要或错误的连词“While...but”并把多条内容挤在同一句中，导致结构混乱。建议把复杂句拆成几句：用适当的连词（如 but）连接对比短句，或用句号分开独立的信息，使逻辑清晰。

× While I usually feel tired when I work late at the office, I have to concentrate for many hours and that makes me feel exhausted, so I often go home and rest for a while.

✓ I usually feel tired when I work late at the office. I have to concentrate for many hours, and that makes me feel exhausted, so I often go home and rest for a while.

开头用“While”引出从句但句子主句未与之正确对照，造成结构不完整或冗长。建议去掉不必要的“While”或将句子拆分，用逗号分开从句与主句，使句子主从关系清晰。

× While I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because it helps me recharge a few more a lot.

✓ I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because it helps me recharge a little.

原句中“recharge a few more a lot”是不自然且错误的搭配。动词后面应接合适的副词或短语表达程度，如“a little”或“a lot”。同时开头“不必要的While”应去掉。建议使用常见搭配“recharge a little”或“recharge a lot（视程度）”。

× For example, I sometimes sleep for 20 minutes in the afternoon and the other times I just sit quietly and listen to music.

✓ For example, I sometimes sleep for 20 minutes in the afternoon; other times I just sit quietly and listen to music.

原句中“the other times”用法不够简洁，且句子较长可用分号或句号分开。建议用“other times”或“at other times”替代“the other times”，并用分号或句号分隔两个对等的并列分句，使表达更自然。