Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a brief reason and one specific example. Replace awkward phrasing ("get some nap in noon", "feel myself better") with natural expressions and keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Not really. I usually feel fine during the day, but I sometimes take a short nap at noon to refresh myself before afternoon classes.

제안: Give a clearer topic sentence and expand with a specific reason and brief detail using linking words. Avoid vague phrasing like "Most of all"; instead say when and why. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

예시: I usually feel tired after school because I have a long day of classes and extracurricular activities, so I'm often mentally and physically worn out by late afternoon.

제안: Use correct tense and natural phrasing. Begin with a direct statement of what you do, then add a short explanation or result using linking words. Keep it within 1–2 sentences and use specific time durations if possible.

예시: I usually lie down for a few minutes to rest, and that helps me regain energy so I can concentrate better on my homework.

× Not really, however, I can get some nap in noon in order to feel myself better.

✓ Not really; however, I can get a nap at noon to make myself feel better.

Errors: 'get some nap' uses incorrect quantifier and noun form (should be 'a nap') and 'in noon' uses wrong preposition (should be 'at noon'). Also 'to feel myself better' is unnatural; use 'to make myself feel better'. Suggestions: use 'a nap' for a single nap, use preposition 'at' with times of day, and use the causative phrase 'make myself feel better' or simply 'feel better'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Most of all, after school.

✓ Mostly, after school.

This fragment is awkward and uses 'Most of all' incorrectly as a time reference; 'Mostly' is a better adverb to indicate frequency. Also the original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb, but in spoken short answers adverbial fragment 'Mostly, after school' is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'Mostly, after school' or 'I usually feel tired after school.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× I just laid down for few minutes.

✓ I just lay down for a few minutes.

The correct past tense of 'lie' (recline) is 'lay' for simple past; 'laid' is the past tense of 'lay' meaning to place something down. Also 'for few minutes' needs the article 'a' -> 'for a few minutes'. Since the speaker says 'just' indicating a recent past, 'I just lay down for a few minutes' is correct. Alternatively, in present perfect: 'I have just lain down for a few minutes.' Suggestion: use 'lay' for simple past of 'lie' and include the article 'a'. Grammar problem type ID:5}]} PMID:0)