Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions (e.g., "it's it's"), correct grammar ("it normally happens"), and add one short supporting detail with a linking word. Keep to max 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after finishing very intense work. For example, when I finish a long study session I usually feel drained, so I take a short rest to recharge.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, fix grammar (use "face" without "with"), avoid repetition, and use a linking word to explain what you do. Be specific about the kinds of tasks or problems to add clarity.

예시: I usually feel tired when I have difficult tasks, such as solving complex problems at work or studying unfamiliar topics. Therefore, I take a short break afterwards to clear my mind and regain focus.

제안: Organize your response: start with a clear main idea, then list one or two specific activities using linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Avoid vague or incorrect words ("hopeful" is unnatural here); use "helpful" or "refreshing". Keep sentences concise.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually stop working and take a short break. For example, I listen to calm music or go for a brief walk outside, which I find very refreshing and helpful.

× Yes, it's it's normally happens when I finish some really intense work and then I will go to take some rest.

✓ Yes, it normally happens when I finish some really intense work and then I go to rest.

Error type: Present tense issue (ID 6). 'It's it's normally happens' has repetition and incorrect contraction; 'it normally happens' is simple present. 'I will go to take some rest' is unnatural future; use simple present 'I go to rest' to describe habitual actions. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'it's', use 'it normally happens', and use simple present to express habits.

× I often feel tired when I have some quite difficult tasks to finish or when I face with some problems that I'm not too familiar with and after after doing it I will just take a short break.

✓ I often feel tired when I have quite difficult tasks to finish or when I face problems that I'm not familiar with, and after doing them I just take a short break.

Error type: Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and additional issues: 'face with' is incorrect; use 'face' or 'be faced with'. Also repetition 'after after' and pronoun agreement: 'doing it' should match plural 'tasks' -> 'doing them'. 'I will just take' should be simple present for habitual action: 'I just take'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use 'face problems' or 'be faced with problems', match pronouns to antecedent, and use simple present for routines.

× Whenever I feel quite tired, I'll just stop doing what I'm doing at the moment and then I will go to take a short break to do some relaxing things like listen to some calm or soft music or to take a short walk outside. They are really hopeful.

✓ Whenever I feel quite tired, I just stop what I'm doing and take a short break to do relaxing things like listen to calm or soft music or take a short walk outside. They are really helpful.

Error type: Article errors (ID 22) and word choice/adverb issues (ID 13). 'I'll just stop doing what I'm doing at the moment' is wordy; use 'I just stop what I'm doing'. 'go to take a short break to do some relaxing things' is repetitive; simplify. 'calm or soft music' is fine but no 'some' needed. Final sentence 'They are really hopeful' uses wrong adjective; 'hopeful' describes people, not activities; use 'helpful' or 'refreshing'. Also use simple present for habitual actions. Suggestions: simplify phrasing, use correct adjective 'helpful', and prefer simple present for routines.