Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify your main idea with a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar and simple vocabulary, and avoid unrelated phrases. Keep it concise (1–3 clear sentences). For example, start with a direct answer like “Yes, I often feel tired.” Then give a brief reason and a time reference using linking words (e.g., “because” or “usually”).

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually feel tired in the mornings because I wake up early to cook and get ready. After I shower and finish my chores, I still feel tired sometimes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence stating specific times you feel tired. Use linking words (e.g., “after,” “when,” “because”) and give one or two precise examples. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

예시: I feel tired mostly after I finish household chores or a long day at college. For example, after I cook in the morning and do work at home, I often feel exhausted. Also, I feel very tired when I come back from college after a busy day.

제안: Begin with a direct answer describing your main action, then add one or two specific activities and a brief reason if possible. Use correct verb forms and linking words like “so” or “then.” Keep answers natural and under five sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually sit down and rest for a while. Sometimes I lie down on my bed to relax and take a short nap so I can regain energy. If I still feel tired, I drink water or make a cup of tea to help me feel better.

× Is Eiffel tired even too tame?

✓ Do you often feel tired?

The original sentence is ungrammatical and does not match the examiner's question. This is a sentence structure error (26). The student should use a clear subject-verb-object structure appropriate for the question. Suggestion: use 'Do you often feel tired?' which is the correct present simple question form for habitual states.

× I cook off in the morning time after they die, taking shower and currently I feel tired.

✓ I wake up in the morning, take a shower and cook, and now I feel tired.

This sentence has multiple structural problems (26) and incorrect verb forms. 'Cook off' and 'after they die' are incorrect collocations; verb sequence and parallelism are wrong. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'wake up', 'take a shower', 'cook'. Put actions in a clear sequence and use conjunctions to connect them.

× Amna Eiffelt many times for today's uh, I cook in the morning, after that I drink some work in my home.

✓ I did many things today. I cooked in the morning, and after that I did some work at home.

The original mixes names and incorrect verb forms. There is a past tense context 'today' so past simple should be used (5) and subject-verb forms must match. 'Cook' should be 'cooked' and 'do work' should be 'did work' or 'worked'. Also use 'at home' for the place preposition (11). This correction applies past tense consistently and fixes preposition use.

× Umm, after all the work now I feel tired sometimes.

✓ After all the work, I sometimes feel tired now.

This sentence uses present tense but word order and adverb placement are awkward (6 and 20). Place adverbs like 'sometimes' before the main verb or after the subject: 'I sometimes feel tired.' Keep 'now' only if emphasizing current moment; otherwise omit.

× Uh, when I came to my college, the time I felt tired so much.

✓ When I come to my college, I feel very tired.

The student is describing a habitual or regular experience when attending college, so present simple is more appropriate (6). The original mixes past tense 'came' and 'felt' awkwardly. If speaking about a specific past occasion, use past simple: 'When I came to college, I felt very tired.' Otherwise use present simple for habitual: 'When I come to college, I feel very tired.' Also 'so much' is informal — 'very' is clearer.

× Umm, basically when I feel tired I sitting down or sometimes laying down in the bed.

✓ Basically, when I feel tired I sit down or sometimes lie down in bed.

The student incorrectly uses progressive '-ing' after 'I' without auxiliary (8). Use the base form 'sit' and 'lie' after modal or simple present: 'I sit down' and 'I lie down.' Also 'in the bed' should be 'in bed' (11/22). 'Laying' is the present participle of 'lay' (which requires an object); use 'lie' for reclining.

× Umm I taking rest.

✓ I take a rest.

This is incorrect use of '-ing' without auxiliary (8). In simple present say 'I take a rest' or 'I rest.' If describing an action happening now, use present continuous with auxiliary: 'I am resting.' Use the correct verb form to match the intended meaning.