Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and correct grammar, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), and add a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details linked logically. Correct plural/singular and verb agreement, and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'exam' → 'exams'; 'phones' → 'my phone').

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because my schedule is very busy with both work and university. For example, I frequently stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone, which leaves me exhausted the next day. In addition, high workload and upcoming exams increase my stress and sap my energy.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence answering when you feel tired, then add 1–2 specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Fix noun/verb forms (meetings, exams; my brain feels overloaded) and use connectors like 'especially when' or 'because'.

예시: I usually feel tired after a long day at work or school, especially when I've had many meetings or exams. Because I have to concentrate for several hours, my brain feels overloaded and all I want to do is relax when I get home.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence about your actions, then explain briefly with specific details. Correct awkward phrases and word choice (e.g., 'Even a 20-minute nap' not 'Even or 20 minutes rush'; 'recharge my batteries'; 'I set an alarm so I don't oversleep'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge. Even a 20-minute nap can really recharge my batteries and help me feel refreshed. I always set an alarm so I don't oversleep and miss my evening tasks.

× Yeah, I do often feel tired, mainly because my schedule is quite packed with both work and study.

✓ Yeah, I often do feel tired, mainly because my schedule is quite packed with both work and study.

The adverb 'often' is misplaced. In affirmative statements with auxiliary 'do', frequency adverbs usually go before the main verb or between the auxiliary and main verb. Moving 'often' before 'do' or between 'do' and 'feel' improves natural word order. Suggestion: place frequency adverbs before the main verb or after the auxiliary (I often feel; I do often feel -> I often do feel).

× I tend to stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phones, which make me feel exhausted the next day.

✓ I tend to stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone, which makes me feel exhausted the next day.

Plural noun and subject-verb agreement errors: 'phones' should be 'phone' if singular device intended; more importantly, the relative clause refers to the singular gerund phrase (watching TV or scrolling on my phone), so the verb should be 'makes' (third-person singular). Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and use singular/plural nouns consistently (my phone, which makes).

× Also, stress from exam or work can really drain my energy.

✓ Also, stress from exams or work can really drain my energy.

Count noun 'exam' needs a quantifier or plural form; 'exams' is natural when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural for general references (exams) or add an article/quantifier (an exam).

× I tend to feel tired after a long day at work or school, especially if I've had a lot of meeting or exam.

✓ I tend to feel tired after a long day at work or school, especially if I've had a lot of meetings or exams.

Both 'meeting' and 'exam' are countable nouns used to indicate multiple occurrences, so they must be plural ('meetings', 'exams') when preceded by 'a lot of'. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to many of them.

× My brain feel overload from focusing for hours and all I want to do is relax when I get home.

✓ My brain feels overloaded from focusing for hours, and all I want to do is relax when I get home.

Two issues: subject-verb agreement ('brain' third-person singular requires 'feels') and incorrect adjective/participle use ('overload' should be past participle/adj 'overloaded'). Also added a comma for clarity. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular/plural subjects and use the correct participle form for state descriptions.

× If I'm feeling tired I like to take a quick nap.

✓ If I'm feeling tired, I like to take a quick nap.

Missing comma after the conditional clause improves readability; the sentence grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: add a comma after introductory subordinate clauses.

× Even or 20 minutes rush can really change my batteries and help me feel refreshed.

✓ Even a 20-minute nap can really recharge my batteries and help me feel refreshed.

Several problems: 'or' is incorrect, '20 minutes' needs hyphenation as a compound adjective ('20-minute') when modifying a noun, 'rush' is the wrong noun (nap), and the idiom is 'recharge my batteries' not 'change my batteries'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and compound adjective forms.

× I always set an alarm to make sure I don't always sleep.

✓ I always set an alarm to make sure I don't oversleep.

Redundant and conflicting use of 'always' and 'don't always' plus wrong verb choice 'sleep' vs the collocation 'oversleep'. Suggestion: use 'oversleep' to express sleeping longer than intended and avoid contradictory adverb placement (I always... to make sure I don't...).