Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, correct verb forms and pronouns, and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired after a day at work or school. When that happens, I usually play a short computer game or prepare a simple meal to relax. These activities help me unwind and improve my mood quickly.

제안: Give one clear reason per answer, correct grammar and word choice, and use a linking word to organize ideas. Replace vague phrases and correct mistakes (e.g., "football match", "it feels"). Provide a specific example or brief detail.

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening after a long day at work because I have been sitting and concentrating for many hours. I also get very tired after playing a full football match since running continuously drains my energy.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your main action, use correct verb forms, and organize additional options with linking words (e.g., "or", "also"). Be specific about typical choices and duration to enrich the answer without exceeding five sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, the first thing I do is drink water to rehydrate. After that, I might play a short video game or read for half an hour, or sometimes I simply lie on my bed and listen to calming music to relax.

× Uh, whenever I feel tired, I often play some games to relax or eating alone.

✓ Uh, whenever I feel tired, I often play some games to relax or eat alone.

This sentence incorrectly mixes the base form 'play' with the gerund 'eating'. When using 'or' to connect parallel verbs, both should be in the same form. Use the base form 'eat' to match 'play'. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure for coordinated verbs: 'play ... or eat'. Replace 'eating' with 'eat'.

× That makes myself feel a lot better.

✓ That makes me feel a lot better.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is used incorrectly here. Reflexive pronouns are used when the subject and object are the same and the action refers back to the subject; 'makes' has a different subject (that) affecting the object (me). Use the object pronoun 'me'. Suggestion: Use 'me' instead of 'myself' in passive effect statements: 'That makes me feel...'.

× Well, I often feel exhausted or tired after my long day of work in the evening because I've been sitting for long hours working or studying.

✓ Well, I often feel exhausted or tired after a long day of work in the evening because I've been sitting for long hours working or studying.

The phrase 'my long day of work' is grammatically possible but unnatural; 'a long day of work' is more idiomatic. The tense and verb forms are otherwise correct. Use 'a' for typical, general events. Suggestion: Use 'a long day of work' for general statements about routine experiences.

× Or especially when I'm finished my football March, it feel much tired because I've been working and running for the whole time.

✓ Or especially when I've finished my football match, I feel very tired because I've been working and running the whole time.

Several issues: 'finished' with 'I'm' is incorrect; use present perfect 'I've finished' or 'when I finish'. 'March' is a misspelling; use 'match'. The clause 'it feel much tired' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong adjective/adverb choice: 'it' should be 'I' (the speaker), 'feel' needs third person singular if subject were 'it' but here subject is 'I' so 'I feel', and 'much tired' is nonstandard—use 'very tired'. Also 'for the whole time' is unnatural; 'the whole time' suffices. Suggestion: Use 'when I've finished my football match, I feel very tired' or 'when I finish my football match, I feel very tired'.

× When I feel tired or exhausted, the first thing that I want is to hydrate myself and I can maybe relax myself by playing some video games, reading some books or even just lying on my bed listening to some music.

✓ When I feel tired or exhausted, the first thing I want to do is hydrate, and I might relax by playing video games, reading a book, or even just lying on my bed listening to music.

Issues: 'the first thing that I want is to hydrate myself' is wordy; use 'the first thing I want to do is hydrate'. 'I can maybe relax myself' uses modal 'can' awkwardly and reflexive 'myself' unnecessarily; use 'I might relax'. 'Playing some video games' is okay but 'playing video games' is more natural; 'reading some books' -> 'reading a book' sounds more natural in this context. Remove redundant reflexive pronouns. Suggestion: Use 'might' or 'may' to indicate possibility, avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns, and keep verbs parallel: 'playing video games, reading a book, or lying on my bed'.