Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "tired" → "sluggish"/"sleepy"). Aim for max 3–4 short sentences.

예시: I often feel tired in the afternoon. This is usually because I have a long, active morning and I don’t have a proper break. As a result, I feel sleepy and sometimes I relax in the evening by playing pickleball or watching Netflix.

제안: Clarify the main point with correct vocabulary and structure. Provide one clear example and use a linking word to explain cause. Reduce repetition and correct word choices (e.g., "a lot of activities", "unfinished work").

예시: I feel tired when I have a lot of activities or unfinished work. For example, after a busy day of meetings and errands, I’m exhausted because I still need to finish tasks at home.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then add a specific, linked detail about your usual routine. Use correct grammar ("if I feel tired"), and include one linking word (e.g., "so"/"then"). Keep answers within 2–3 sentences.

예시: If I feel tired, I usually lie down and rest for a short time. Then, if I still feel sleepy, I take a quick nap to recharge before continuing my activities.

× Usually I feel tired, uh, in the afternoon because umm, I feel umm, sleep sleepy and maybe, umm uh, in the evening I have lots of uh, activities like playing pickleball or watching Netflix on TV.

✓ Usually I feel tired in the afternoon because I feel sleepy, and in the evening I have lots of activities like playing pickleball or watching Netflix.

The phrase 'sleep sleepy' is incorrect; use the adjective 'sleepy'. Remove filler words and redundant phrases for clarity. Also 'lots of activities' is fine but keep parallel structure: 'playing pickleball or watching Netflix.' Suggestion: practice using simple adjective forms and parallel lists.

× Uh, I feel tired, uh, when I have a lots of umm, activities or I have, uh, finding I have a fending works and I want to finish that, umm, that's all, uh, maybe a lots of, umm, activities like flying pickleball, uh, example.

✓ I feel tired when I have a lot of activities or when I have pending work that I want to finish. For example, I might have many activities like playing pickleball.

'a lots of' is incorrect; the correct form is 'a lot of' or 'many'. 'fending works' appears to be 'pending work' (uncountable), so use singular 'work' or 'pending tasks' for countable. 'flying pickleball' should be 'playing pickleball'. Suggestion: learn countable vs uncountable nouns and common collocations like 'a lot of', 'pending work', and correct verb 'playing'.

× Umm, I, if I feeling tired, uh, I maybe I get, uh, set or lying on my bed or have a sleep, that's all.

✓ If I feel tired, I usually sit or lie on my bed or take a nap.

The clause 'if I feeling tired' uses incorrect verb form; use simple present 'feel' in conditional. 'get, set or lying' is ungrammatical; use 'sit or lie'. 'have a sleep' is nonstandard in English; use 'take a nap'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms in conditionals (If + present), and learn common verbs for resting: 'sit', 'lie', 'take a nap'.