Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your response addresses the question but is repetitive and has some grammar issues. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, varying vocabulary, correcting tense consistency, and avoiding repetition. Add one specific detail and a linking phrase to make it more natural (max 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, particularly when exams are approaching. For example, last week I had a major exam and I felt exhausted and sleepy for several days before it. As a result, I found it hard to concentrate on my revision.

제안: Your answer repeats the same ideas and uses informal fillers. Give a direct topic sentence, then add two concise, specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Check grammar (avoid 'so tired' twice) and keep it under five sentences.

예시: I usually feel tired in the morning and also in the days leading up to exams. In the morning I am sleepy because I often wake up early, and before exams I feel drained due to late-night studying.

제안: The answer is relevant but contains repetition and grammatical errors. Start with a clear statement of your typical action, then give a specific example and explain briefly why it helps, using linking words like 'for example' and 'because'.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually do some outdoor exercise to refresh myself. For example, I often play badminton in the morning with my best friend because the fresh air and movement help me feel more alert.

× I often feel tired especially before the exam.

✓ I often feel tired, especially before exams.

The original uses 'the exam' which implies one specific exam; context refers to exams in general so plural 'exams' is correct. Also add a comma before 'especially' for clarity.

× Last week I had an exam so I feel so tired and want to sleep.

✓ Last week I had an exam, so I felt very tired and wanted to sleep.

The main clause describes a past event ('Last week I had an exam') so following verbs should be in the past tense: 'felt' and 'wanted'. 'So tired' is better expressed as 'very tired' in this context for naturalness. Add a comma before 'so' linking the clauses.

× To be honest, I often feel tired in the morning or before the exam.

✓ To be honest, I often feel tired in the morning or before exams.

Same issue as earlier: context is general so use plural 'exams'. Sentence structure is otherwise fine.

× In the morning I want to sleep more so I feel so tired and before the exam I want to sleep too.

✓ In the morning I want to sleep more, so I feel tired, and before exams I want to sleep too.

Maintain consistent general present-tense usage. Replace 'the exam' with 'exams' for general reference. Remove the redundant second 'so' and the repeated 'so tired' — use one 'so' or 'very' if emphasis is needed. Add commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× When I feel tired, I often play outdoor with my friend.

✓ When I feel tired, I often play outdoors with my friend.

Use the adverb 'outdoors' (not adjective 'outdoor') after 'play'. Also consider plural 'friends' if speaking about more than one; here keep singular as 'my friend' if correct.

× For example, I often play badminton in morning in the morning with my best friend.

✓ For example, I often play badminton in the morning with my best friend.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'morning'. Remove the duplicated phrase 'in morning in the morning'. The corrected sentence places the article correctly and eliminates repetition.