Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用更简洁和直接的句子回答问题，注意时态和语法，纠正词汇搭配错误并减少冗长。比如把“Across as an student in my gap year”改为“I’m a student on a gap year”并说明频率（例如“often”或“sometimes”）。另外把“work portfolio”改为“portfolio”或“application materials”，以及“post graduate”改为“postgraduate”。整体不要超过三到四句。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired. I’m a student on a gap year and I’m preparing my portfolio for postgraduate applications and studying for the IELTS. Balancing both tasks frequently makes me feel exhausted.

제안: 回答应直接说明具体时间或情境，注意语法（例如使用动名词或过去分词），并使用连接词使句子更连贯。纠正“不自然”的短语，如“practicing a lot in aisles”应改为“practicing for interviews”或“doing lots of practice”。句子控制在两到三句内并给出一两个具体例子。

예시: I usually feel tired after a long, busy day working on my portfolio or doing lots of practice for interviews. For example, after several hours of writing and editing documents I feel drained and need to rest.

제안: 回答要更清晰并用更恰当的词汇描述行为，避免语法错误和拼写错误（例如“Tiktok”拼写正确，且不要用“right notes”或“sing”误用）。可以先给出主句，然后用一两句具体说明喜欢的内容类型和原因，使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually browse social media to relax. I often watch short videos on TikTok or longer clips on YouTube because they are entertaining and help me forget stress for a while.

× Across as an student in my gap year, I need to prepare for my work portfolio for my post graduate application and I also need to prepare for my IELTS test to get a high scores.

✓ As a student on my gap year, I need to prepare my work portfolio for my postgraduate application, and I also need to prepare for my IELTS test to get a high score.

问题类型：句子结构和其他相关错误。解释：原句中开头的短语“Across as an student”不符合英语表达，应为“As a student”。“in my gap year”常用介词是“on my gap year”或更自然的“during my gap year”。“prepare for my work portfolio”中的介词不当，通常说“prepare my portfolio”或“prepare a portfolio”；“post graduate”应写为复合词“postgraduate”。“a high scores”中“a”与复数“scores”冲突，应为“a high score”或“high scores”去掉冠词。建议：把句子重组为更自然的表达，注意冠词与单复数一致，使用正确介词和复合词写法。

× After a long busy day prepare my work portfolio or practicing a lot in aisles, I would feel very tired and I need some relax to unwind myself.

✓ After a long, busy day preparing my work portfolio or practising a lot in aisles, I feel very tired and I need some rest to unwind.

问题类型：现在时和动词形式使用错误。解释：原句中“prepare my work portfolio”应使用动名词形式“preparing”以与“After”引导的时间状语结构一致；“practicing”拼写英式为“practising”，且应与前半部分并列同为动名词；“would feel”在一般描述习惯时用一般现在时“feel”；“need some relax”错误，名词应为“rest”；“unwind myself”冗余，通常直接说“unwind”。建议：将动词改为动名词，使用一般现在时表示常态，替换不正确的名词并简化短语。

× Well, I usually just go through different social media to unwind, especially like the Tiktok right notes or the YouTube because I can just sing a lot of entertainment and interesting informations and videos online.

✓ Well, I usually just browse different social media to unwind, especially TikTok or YouTube, because I can find a lot of entertaining and interesting information and videos online.

问题类型：动词+ -ing形式及词汇搭配错误。解释：原句中“go through different social media”不自然，常用动词为“browse”；“the Tiktok right notes”无意义且有语序错误，正确应为“TikTok”；“the YouTube”不需要定冠词；“sing a lot of entertainment”用词错误，应为“find a lot of entertaining …”或“watch a lot of …”；“interesting informations”中information是不可数名词，不可加复数。建议：使用合适动词（browse/find），删除多余冠词，使用不可数名词形式，并把形容词放在名词前修饰（entertaining and interesting information）。