Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 바로잡고 더 명확한 주제문을 사용하세요. 현재 답변은 중복 표현과 시제 오류(예: 'every day go to the school')가 있고, 이유 제시가 모호합니다. 개선을 위해 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 한두 개의 구체적 이유를 linking word(예: 'because', 'so', 'therefore')로 연결하세요. 예: 주어+동사 형태를 정확히 사용하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I have to go to school every day and study for long hours. Because of the heavy workload and frequent exams, I usually feel mentally exhausted. Therefore, I try to sleep earlier on weekdays.

제안: 질문을 정확히 이해하고 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요. 현재 답변은 과거와 현재를 혼동하고 문장이 끊겨 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 'When' 질문에는 특정 상황이나 시간(예: 'in the evening', 'during exams')을 명확히 제시하세요. 또한 linking word(예: 'when', 'during', 'because')로 이유와 상황을 연결하세요.

예시: I usually feel tired in the evenings, especially during exam periods. When I have a lot of homework or revision to do after school, I often feel drained and sleepy.

제안: 행동을 구체적으로 설명하고 어휘를 정확히 사용하세요. 현재 답변은 어휘 오류('oral food')와 문법 문제('some I rested about the everyday')가 있습니다. 구체적인 활동(예: 'take a short nap', 'read a novel', 'eat comfort food')을 순서대로 제시하고 linking words('for example', 'so', 'sometimes')로 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or read a book to relax. For comfort, I sometimes eat pasta or pizza, especially when I'm stressed. If I need energy quickly, I grab a simple snack like instant noodles.

× I every day go to the school.

✓ I go to school every day.

The phrase used 'the school' is unnecessary when speaking generally; 'school' is an uncountable/place noun in this context. Also word order should be natural: place/time adverbial 'every day' after the verb. Suggestion: say 'I go to school every day.'

× It is very stress because so I, I, I really do not like the stress.

✓ It is very stressful, so I really do not like the stress.

Use the adjective 'stressful' to describe something that causes stress; 'very stress' is incorrect. Also 'because so' is redundant; use 'so' or 'because' but not both. Suggestion: use 'stressful' and a single connector: 'so' or 'because.'

× Yes. So I think it is a reason.

✓ Yes. So I think that is the reason.

Phrase 'it is a reason' is unnatural; use 'that is the reason' or 'it is the reason' to refer to the cause. Include the conjunction 'that' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I think that is the reason.'

× Oh, when I, when I was two years ago, I went to the high school.

✓ Oh, two years ago I went to high school.

Use a clear past-time expression 'two years ago' at the start or end; 'when I was two years ago' is incorrect. Also 'the high school' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'Two years ago I went to high school.'

× I, I think could, uh, if I go to the, uh, high school or school, I've, I can feel the.

✓ I think I could feel it if I go to high school.

Word order and modal use were mixed. 'Could' should follow the subject 'I' and be used with the base verb 'feel.' 'If I go to high school' is the correct conditional clause. 'The' before 'high school' is unnecessary and the sentence-ending object 'the' should be 'it.' Suggestion: 'I think I could feel it if I go to high school.'

× Yeah, some I rested about the everyday and or I read the book and I eat the oral food.

✓ Sometimes I rest every day, or I read a book and I eat regular food.

'Some' should be 'sometimes.' 'I rested about the everyday' is ungrammatical; use 'I rest every day.' 'the book' should be 'a book' when nonspecific. 'oral food' is incorrect; likely 'regular food' or 'normal food.' Suggestion: 'Sometimes I rest every day, or I read a book and eat regular food.'

× For example, I like the pasta and pizza or instant food.

✓ For example, I like pasta, pizza, or instant food.

When listing foods generally, do not use 'the' before plural nouns. Use commas to separate items and 'or' before the last item. Suggestion: 'I like pasta, pizza, or instant food.'

× I everyday if I have stress, I can eat the other food.

✓ Every day, if I feel stressed, I eat other food.

Use 'every day' two words and place it properly. 'If I have stress' is unnatural; use 'if I feel stressed.' Modal 'can eat' is not necessary; use simple present 'eat' to describe habitual action. 'The other food' should be 'other food.' Suggestion: 'Every day, if I feel stressed, I eat other food.'