Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural, avoid repetition and small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, especially) and correct word choice (e.g., "repetitive tasks" instead of "respective tasks").

예시: Yes, I often feel tired after a long day at work because my job involves long meetings and repetitive tasks. For example, on days with back-to-back meetings I feel mentally drained by late afternoon.

제안: Avoid repeating the same phrase and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. Provide one clear time frame and one or two specific activities that cause tiredness, using linking words like "especially" or "after" for coherence. Replace repeated words with varied vocabulary (e.g., "exhausted" instead of repeating "worn out").

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening after a full day at work, especially if I still have housework or errands to do. By the time I finish cooking and cleaning, I feel exhausted and just want to relax and go to bed.

제안: This answer is clear and structured well. To improve further, add a short reason why those activities help and use a linking phrase (e.g., "for example" or "because"). Keep it to two to three sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "recharge" -> "recharge my batteries").

예시: When I'm mentally tired, I watch light comedies at home because they help me laugh and forget stress. If I'm physically exhausted, I go to bed early to recharge my batteries and wake up feeling refreshed.

× I'm not an energetic person, so I usually feel exhausted after long meetings or when I have to do respective tasks.

✓ I'm not an energetic person, so I usually feel exhausted after long meetings or when I have to do repetitive tasks.

The word 'respective' is incorrect here; 'respective' means relating separately to each of two or more people or things, which doesn't fit the context. The intended meaning is tasks that repeat, so use the adjective 'repetitive'. Replace 'respective' with 'repetitive' to convey repeated tasks clearly.

× By the time I finish everything, I feel worn out, worn out and just want to relax and go to bed.

✓ By the time I finish everything, I feel worn out and just want to relax and go to bed.

The phrase 'worn out' is repeated, creating redundancy and a sentence structure issue. Remove the repeated phrase to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× When I'm mentally tired, I usually watch light comedies by myself to relax and cheer up.

✓ When I'm mentally tired, I usually watch light comedies by myself to relax and cheer up.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but note that 'by myself' emphasizes doing the activity alone; if the speaker means 'alone' this is fine. No change needed. Included here to indicate no issue detected under listed types.

× When I'm physically exhausted, I try to sleep early so I can recharge my energy.

✓ When I'm physically exhausted, I try to go to bed early so I can recharge my energy.

The original sentence is understandable, but 'sleep early' is less natural in English; 'go to bed early' is the common collocation. This is not strictly a past tense error, but replacing the phrase improves naturalness while keeping tense consistent.