Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Anda menjawab singkat dan tidak langsung menjawab frekuensi. Berikan kalimat topik yang jelas tentang seberapa sering Anda merasa lelah, lalu tambahkan satu atau dua detail pendukung yang relevan. Gunakan struktur yang alami dan hindari pengulangan.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially at the end of a busy day. For example, after a full day at work I usually feel low on energy and prefer to relax at home.

제안: Jawaban Anda tidak jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa. Mulailah dengan kalimat topik yang langsung menjawab kapan Anda merasa lelah, lalu jelaskan mengapa dengan contoh spesifik. Gunakan kata penghubung seperti "because" atau "when" untuk keterkaitan logis.

예시: I usually feel tired when I have to do tasks I dislike, because they drain my energy quickly. For instance, doing repetitive paperwork makes me lose focus and feel exhausted.

제안: Jawaban Anda kacau dan sulit dimengerti karena ada kesalahan pemilihan kata dan struktur. Berikan satu kalimat topik diikuti oleh 1–3 kegiatan spesifik. Gunakan kata hubung seperti "so" atau "or" dengan benar dan hindari kata yang tidak relevan.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge or listen to calming music to relax. If I still need to unwind, I might scroll through social media for a few minutes.

× We I do something we don't like.

✓ When I do something I don't like, I feel tired.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and an extra pronoun 'We' that disrupts sentence structure. This is a sentence structure error: the subject and time clause need to be organized correctly. Use a subordinate time clause 'When I do something I don't like' followed by the main clause 'I feel tired.' Suggestion: remove the extra 'We' and place the subordinate clause at the beginning or end of the sentence.

× I when I feel tired I usually sleep, listen to music through or just grow so through social media.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually sleep, listen to music, or just browse social media.

The original sentence has several problems: incorrect word order, wrong verb choice 'grow' instead of 'browse', and the extra word 'through'. This is primarily a present tense and verb choice issue. Use the simple present 'I usually sleep, listen, or browse' to describe habitual actions. Also place the time clause 'When I feel tired' at the beginning followed by a comma, and use the correct verb 'browse' for using social media. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and choose verbs that match the intended meaning.