Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有明确主题句，指出父母和书籍是礼貌教育的来源，但存在明显的词汇和语法问题，例如“be a people”应改为“behave properly”，“the books they have memories”表达不自然。建议使用“First... In addition...”组织两个来源，并提供一个具体行为例子，如向长辈问好或使用“please”和“thank you”。避免重复使用“uh”和重复“the books”。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to behave properly, use polite expressions, and respect older people. In addition, traditional stories showed me the importance of being a gentleman. For example, I learned to greet adults respectfully and say “please” and “thank you”.

제안: 回答直接表达了观点，也提到了礼貌对双方都有好处，但“good for you and me”较口语化且重复，“on”是明显的停顿或错误；“if you met someone on the outside”应改为“when you meet people in daily life”。建议用“because”清楚解释原因，并加入具体结果，例如减少冲突、建立良好关系。最后的“it depends”与前面的绝对观点矛盾，除非补充具体条件，否则应删除。

예시: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it helps people build positive relationships. When we speak respectfully, others are more likely to treat us well in return. It can also prevent misunderstandings and make everyday interactions more pleasant. For example, a polite request usually receives a better response than a rude one.

제안: 回答的核心观点清楚，即在所有场合都应保持礼貌，也进行了家庭和公共场合的对比。但“perform polite”搭配错误，应改为“behave politely”或“be polite”；句子结构重复且结尾不完整。建议先给出总观点，再用“whether...or...”列举家庭、学校、工作场所和公共场合，并说明礼貌能让交流更顺畅。

예시: We should be polite in every situation, whether we are at home, at school, or in public. Good manners are especially important when we are speaking to older people, teachers, or strangers. Being respectful makes communication smoother and creates a more pleasant environment for everyone.

제안: 回答尝试提供了两个例子，但“polite nurse”应为“politeness”，“the way I show...is”时态和结构不自然；“on public”应改为“in public”。“keep quiet during meals”可以作为具体行为，但后半句没有明确说明你做了什么。建议使用过去时，并列出清晰的行为，例如吃饭时不打断别人、向长辈问候、在公共场所让座，同时用“also”连接细节。

예시: As a child, I showed my politeness by staying quiet and listening during family meals. I also greeted older relatives respectfully and waited for them to sit down first. In public places, I tried not to make too much noise and gave up my seat to elderly people when necessary.

× They taught me how to be a people, uh, correctly.

✓ They taught me how to be a polite person.

“People”通常表示复数，不能与冠词“a”搭配表示“一个人”。这里应该使用单数名词“person”。另外，用“polite person”比“person correctly”更自然。

× They have memories, stories like ancient Chinese story.

✓ They have memories and stories, such as ancient Chinese stories.

“story”在这里表示多个故事，因此应使用复数形式“stories”。同时，列举内容时使用“such as”更清楚。

× It's not only good for you and me, it's also good for others.

✓ It's not only good for you and me, but it's also good for others.

“not only”通常要和“but also”搭配使用，表示“不仅……而且……”。不能只使用“not only”而省略“but”。

× If you met someone on the outside, you hope they can be polite.

✓ If you meet someone outside, you hope they can be polite.

这句话描述一般情况，应使用一般现在时。条件从句中的“met”应改为“meet”。“outside”在这里比“on the outside”更自然。

× It's depends.

✓ It depends.

“depend”前面已经有第三人称单数主语“It”，所以应直接使用第三人称单数形式“depends”，不能再使用系动词“is”。

× You should perform polite in your family.

✓ You should behave politely with your family.

“polite”是形容词，不能直接修饰动词“perform”。描述“如何表现”时应使用副词“politely”，而“behave politely”是更自然的表达。

× You should also do the same as in public because it's good for everybody.

✓ You should also behave politely in public because it's good for everybody.

“do the same as in public”结构不完整，意思不清楚。这里需要直接说明地点和行为，因此应使用“behave politely in public”。

× The way I show politeness as a child is to keep quiet.

✓ The way I showed politeness as a child was to keep quiet.

问题询问的是童年时期的行为，属于过去时间，所以“show”和“is”都应改为过去式“showed”和“was”。

× I keep quiet when I'm having dinner.

✓ I kept quiet when I was having dinner.

“as a child”表示过去的时间，因此主要动词“keep”应改为“kept”。同时，过去某个时间正在吃饭，应使用过去进行时“was having”。

× We can show some respect to old people on public.

✓ I showed some respect to older people in public.

“public”表示公共场合时通常使用介词“in”，所以应说“in public”，不能说“on public”。此外，由于问题询问过去的行为，使用“I showed”与上下文更一致。