Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接提到了父母，但“made a lot of strict manners”搭配不自然，应该说“set strict rules”或“taught me good manners”。另外，“they told me how to behave better”表达重复且不够具体。建议使用“父母教我的方式+具体例子”的结构，例如提到说“please”和“thank you”，或尊重长辈。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and to listen when other people were speaking. They also set a good example by treating everyone respectfully.

제안: 观点明确，但“As I do”用法错误，应改为“Yes, definitely”或“I do”。“show a very polite manner”不自然，可以说“behave politely”或“treat others politely”。此外，两个“If”结构连接混乱，建议用“because”清楚说明原因，并补充一个具体结果。

예시: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it helps people feel respected and comfortable during a conversation. As a result, they are more likely to communicate openly and build a good relationship with you.

제안: 回答提到了学校和工作场合，方向正确，但“so many occasions just like me”和“more easier”不自然且重复。建议先直接回答“在所有正式或需要与人合作的场合”，再用“for example”列举学校、工作或服务场景，并说明礼貌能带来的具体好处。

예시: We should be polite in almost every social situation, especially at school and at work. For example, I try to speak respectfully to my teachers and colleagues, even when I disagree with them. This makes cooperation easier and helps avoid unnecessary conflicts.

제안: 回答包含“微笑”这一具体行为，但时态错误较多：过去应使用“chose”和“met”。“that's the basics...”以及“poor person”语义不清，“smell”应为“smile”，“more closer”应为“closer”。建议用两到三个简单、准确的行为来回答，例如微笑、问候和说谢谢。

예시: When I was a child, I showed politeness by smiling and greeting people when I met them. I also said “thank you” when someone helped me. These small gestures helped me make a good impression and become closer to others.

× When I was a child I learned to be polite from my parents and they made a lot of strict manners that they told me how to behave better.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite from my parents. They set strict rules and taught me how to behave better.

原句把多个完整意思连接在一个句子中，且“that they told me”结构不正确。应拆分句子，并使用“teach someone how to do something”这一结构。注意：teach的过去式是taught。

× As I do, I think being polite is very important in people's communication. If you show a very polite manner, and the other person will feel safe, and your communication will become much better.

✓ I think being polite is very important in communication. If you are polite, the other person will feel comfortable, and your communication will become much better.

“If”引导条件从句后，应直接接主句，不能在主句前再使用多余的“and”。另外，“in people's communication”表达不自然，这里用“in communication”更合适。条件句的结构是“If + 一般现在时，主语 + will + 动词原形”。

× So many occasions just like me at school and when you're at work just like me, I have to be polite with my colleagues at work because that would make my work more easier.

✓ There are many occasions when we should be polite, such as when we are at school or at work. I have to be polite to my colleagues because that makes my work easier.

表示“有很多场合”应使用“There are”，不能直接用“So many occasions”开头。原句中的“more easier”重复使用了比较形式；“easier”本身已经是比较级，不能再加“more”。另外，原句成分排列混乱，因此需要拆分并重新组织。

× When I was a child, I choose to smile when I meet someone and that's the basics seeing a child think that he or her should be a polite person poor person. You use smell and you get more closer with people.

✓ When I was a child, I chose to smile when I met someone. I thought that children should be polite. A smile can help you get closer to people.

叙述童年经历时，应使用过去时：“choose”改为“chose”，“meet”改为“met”。“he or her”代词形式错误，应为“he or she”，但这里用复数“children”更自然。“the basics”与单数结构不一致，且原句结构不完整，因此需要重新组织。“more closer”重复使用比较形式，应改为“closer”。