Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer directly explains who taught you, and the example is relevant. However, it ends abruptly after “elders,” so complete the sentence and add one specific result or example. Use parallel structures such as “saying thank you and standing up to greet my elders.”

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, especially my mother. She taught me to say “thank you,” apologize when necessary, and stand up to greet my elders. She also reminded me that showing respect would help me build good relationships with other people.

제안: You express a clear opinion and give reasons, but the answer is repetitive and unfinished. Replace unnatural expressions such as “the youngers” with “younger people” or “young people,” and avoid saying “need respect” twice. Explain the workplace benefit clearly, for example, by saying that politeness helps you build trust and cooperation.

예시: Yes, I think politeness is extremely important because it helps people communicate respectfully. We should show respect to everyone, including older and younger people, since everyone deserves to be treated well. In the workplace, being polite can help us build trust and maintain positive relationships with our colleagues.

제안: Your main idea is clear: people should be polite in all situations. However, the opening sentence has incorrect word order, and the final sentence is incomplete. Use a concise topic sentence, then give two or three specific situations with a linking phrase such as “for example.”

예시: I believe we should be polite in every situation, not just on special occasions. For example, we should be respectful at work, in shops, and when speaking to service workers such as supermarket staff or street vendors. In my opinion, treating everyone politely is a basic part of being a considerate person.

제안: You provide several relevant examples, but the verb tense should be consistently in the past: use “greeted” instead of “greet.” Some phrases are unnatural, such as “helped me in managing” and “good sport person.” Organize the examples with linking words and use natural expressions such as “helped me with” and “was a good sport.”

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by standing up whenever my elders entered the room and greeting them respectfully. I also thanked them for anything they did to help me. With my friends, I shared things, congratulated them when they succeeded, and tried to be a good sport when I lost a game.

× She taught me the basics of saying thank you, standing up to greet elders

✓ She taught me the basics of saying thank you and standing up to greet elders.

The original sentence contains two coordinated actions, but the connection between them is unclear. Use and to link saying thank you and standing up. Also, add a full stop to complete the sentence.

× Being polite with elders is extremely essential and so with the youngers too

✓ Being polite toward elders is extremely important, and the same applies to younger people too.

Youngers is not normally used as a noun in standard English. Use younger people instead. Also, extremely essential is an unnatural combination because essential already expresses a very strong meaning; extremely important is more natural.

× If you're polite in your workplace you can excel in building

✓ If you're polite in your workplace, you can excel at building relationships.

The verb excel is followed by the preposition at, not in, when referring to an activity. The original sentence is also incomplete because building needs an object, such as relationships.

× A person who is polite is I believe polite in every situation.

✓ I believe that a polite person is polite in every situation.

I believe is inserted in an incorrect position in the original sentence. Place the reporting phrase before the clause and use that to connect the two parts clearly.

× There is no particular situation that you need to be polite whether it's at workplace in your day to day life, you are at supermarket

✓ There is no particular situation in which you do not need to be polite, whether you are at the workplace or at a supermarket in your day-to-day life.

Singular countable nouns such as workplace and supermarket usually need an article. Use the workplace and a supermarket. The phrase in which also correctly connects situation with the following clause.

× There is no particular situation that you need to be polite whether it's at workplace in your day to day life

✓ There is no particular situation in which you do not need to be polite, whether you are at the workplace or going about your day-to-day life.

The preposition in is needed in the phrase in which you need to be polite. The revised sentence also uses natural prepositions and structure to express different situations.

× You are at supermarket, buying groceries or talking to a vegetable vendor

✓ You are at a supermarket, buying groceries, or talking to a vegetable vendor.

Supermarket is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a. A vegetable vendor is already correctly formed because vendor is also a singular countable noun.

× That's the basic of a human virtue that

✓ That is the basis of human virtue.

Basic is an adjective, but the sentence requires a noun. Use basis, which means the fundamental principle or foundation. The original sentence also ends with the incomplete word that, so it should be removed.

× As a child, I always greet my elders by standing up whenever they enter the room.

✓ As a child, I always greeted my elders by standing up whenever they entered the room.

The phrase As a child refers to a past period, so the verbs should be in the simple past: greeted and entered.

× I used to often say thank you for the little things

✓ I often used to say thank you for the little things.

With used to, frequency adverbs such as often are generally placed before used to. This position makes the sentence sound more natural and clear.

× The little things that my elders helped me in managing

✓ The little things that my elders helped me with

When help means assist someone with something, use help someone with something. Therefore, helped me with is the correct prepositional structure here.

× To my friends also I was very courteous

✓ I was also very courteous to my friends.

The preposition to is correctly used with courteous when describing the person receiving polite treatment. Also should be placed after the subject and verb phrase, and the original opening to my friends creates an unnatural structure.

× I was very courteous by again saying greeting them, saying thank you and being a good sport person.

✓ I was very courteous by greeting them, saying thank you, and being a good sport.

The phrase saying greeting them incorrectly combines two verb forms; use greeting them. Because the speaker is describing childhood behavior, the past-tense form was is appropriate. Good sport is the natural noun phrase; sport person is not standard English.