Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接提到父母的教育，符合问题要求，但句子过长，且“everyone even the strangers”“that is good for us to know us”等表达不自然。建议使用清晰的主题句，然后补充具体行为和结果；注意使用过去时，并用“because”或“For example”连接细节。

예시: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. They reminded me to greet people, say “please” and “thank you,” and listen when others were speaking. They believed that good manners showed respect and helped me make a positive impression.

제안: 回答有明确观点和原因，但“symbolizes our parents upbringing”搭配不准确，应改为“reflects how we were brought up”或“shows our parents’ influence”。“to adults”和“on the occasion that is really important”不自然，建议用更具体的场景，如工作面试或正式社交活动。

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it reflects how we were brought up and shows respect for other people. It can also create a good first impression, especially in important situations such as a job interview or a formal meeting.

제안: 回答结构较清楚，先给出“every occasion”的观点，再举例说明，内容基本有效。需要改进词语搭配：“job interviewing”应改为“job interviews”，“wedding”最好用复数“weddings”；“symbolize our parents’ education for us”不自然，可改为“reflect our upbringing”。

예시: I think we should be polite on every occasion, but it is especially important during job interviews, weddings, and formal meetings. For example, we should greet people appropriately, listen carefully, and avoid interrupting them. These behaviors show respect and reflect our upbringing.

제안: 回答提到了具体行为“say goodbye and thank you”，但重复了“as a child”和“show my politeness”，句子结构混乱，且时态不一致（“I am taught”应使用过去时）。建议先说明行为，再解释母亲如何教你以及这些行为带来的结果。

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by saying “please,” “thank you,” and “goodbye” to people. My mother taught me to use these expressions whenever I received something or left someone’s home. As a result, people usually had a positive impression of me.

× When I was a child my parents taught me how to be polite to everyone even the strangers because it could show our manners and respect for everyone that is good for us to know us

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me how to be polite to everyone, even strangers, because being polite showed our manners and respect for everyone and helped us get to know others.

“Strangers”在这里表示泛指的一类人，不需要使用定冠词“the”。泛指复数名词前通常不加冠词。

× When I was a child my parents taught me how to be polite to everyone even the strangers because it could show our manners and respect for everyone that is good for us to know us

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me how to be polite to everyone, even strangers, because being polite showed our manners and respect for everyone and helped us get to know others.

原句最后的“that is good for us to know us”结构不完整，而且“know us”不符合想表达的意思。可以改为“helped us get to know others”，表示“帮助我们了解他人”。

× Yes, it's very important because it symbolizes our parents upbringing and it could leave a good impression to adults, especially on the occasion that is really important

✓ Yes, it's very important because it symbolizes our parents' upbringing and could leave a good impression on adults, especially on occasions that are really important.

固定搭配是“leave a good impression on someone”，表示“给某人留下好印象”，不能使用“to”。另外，“on occasions”更适合表示泛指的多个重要场合。

× I think on every occasion we should be polite, especially the important occasions such as job interviewing and wedding because it could show our respect to others and it could symbolize our parents' education for us.

✓ I think we should be polite on every occasion, especially on important occasions such as job interviews and weddings, because they could show our respect for others and symbolize the education our parents gave us.

“such as”后面列举的是多个场合，因此“job interviewing”应改为复数名词“job interviews”，“wedding”应改为“weddings”。

× I think on every occasion we should be polite, especially the important occasions such as job interviewing and wedding because it could show our respect to others and it could symbolize our parents' education for us.

✓ I think we should be polite on every occasion, especially on important occasions such as job interviews and weddings, because they could show our respect for others and symbolize the education our parents gave us.

“respect”表示“对某人的尊重”时，通常与介词“for”搭配，因此应说“respect for others”，而不是“respect to others”。

× As a child I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others to show my politeness and when I was a child because I am taught by my mother, so I think it could leave a good impression

✓ As a child, I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others because I was taught to do so by my mother, and I think this could leave a good impression.

整段描述的是童年时期的经历，因此“am taught”应使用过去时“was taught”。“I was taught to do so”表示“我被教导这样做”。

× As a child I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others to show my politeness and when I was a child because I am taught by my mother, so I think it could leave a good impression

✓ As a child, I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others because I was taught to do so by my mother, and I think this could leave a good impression.

原句同时使用了“because”和“so”来连接同一组因果关系，造成连接混乱。使用“because”表达原因后，不需要再使用“so”。

× As a child I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others to show my politeness and when I was a child because I am taught by my mother, so I think it could leave a good impression

✓ As a child, I showed my politeness by saying goodbye and thank you to others because I was taught to do so by my mother, and I think this could leave a good impression.

原句重复使用了“As a child”和“when I was a child”，并且多个从句连续连接，导致句子结构混乱。可以删去重复内容，并按照“行为—原因—结果”的顺序组织句子。