Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain how your parents and school taught you manners. Improve grammar by using “behave politely,” “we had to,” and “both at school and at home.” Avoid the incomplete ending and the unnecessary detail about kneeling unless it is explained clearly. Use past tense consistently because you are describing childhood.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my teachers. At home, my parents taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and to respect older people. At school, we also had to greet our teachers and behave respectfully in class. Therefore, both my family and my school played an important role in teaching me good manners.

제안: Give a clear reason for your opinion, but avoid making a broad or negative generalization about the younger generation. “In prison time” is unclear and should be replaced with “nowadays” or “these days.” Use “impolite,” not “unpolite,” and make the comparison more natural: “unlike previous generations.”

예시: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important because it helps people communicate respectfully and avoid unnecessary conflicts. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can make everyday interactions much more pleasant. Although some young people may not have been taught good manners, I think politeness is still highly valued in most families and workplaces.

제안: Mention several relevant occasions rather than focusing only on stores, and complete your final sentence. Use natural expressions such as “cashiers” and “shop assistants” instead of “the person behind the cash register” and “personal shoppers.” Organize the answer with a linking word such as “For example” or “In addition,” and explain why politeness matters in these situations.

예시: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in public places and professional situations. For example, when shopping, we should treat cashiers and shop assistants respectfully, even if there is a problem. We should also be polite when speaking to teachers, colleagues, or elderly people because respectful behavior creates a more pleasant atmosphere.

제안: The answer is relevant and includes specific examples, but improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness. Use “I would say” or “I said” instead of “I will say,” and say “I addressed older people as ‘Madam’ or ‘Sir’” rather than “depending on gender.” Avoid joining too many ideas in one sentence; use linking words to make the examples clearer.

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by thanking people whenever they helped me. I also said “please” whenever I asked for something. In addition, I addressed older people as “Madam” or “Sir” to show respect. These were simple habits, but they helped me make a good impression.

× So when I was younger, it was super important for us to behave very polite.

✓ So when I was younger, it was super important for us to behave very politely.

The word politely is an adverb, and it modifies the verb behave. The adjective polite cannot directly modify a verb. Use adjectives after linking verbs, but use adverbs to describe actions. A useful pattern is behave, speak, or act + adverb.

× In school it was really strict so each day we had to stand up when the teacher came and we have to kneel for him or her.

✓ In school, it was really strict, so each day we had to stand up when the teacher came, and we had to kneel for him or her.

The whole experience happened in the past, so have to must change to had to. Keep the verbs in the same past-time frame: was, had to, and came.

× So I think that both school and from the household that I lived in

✓ So I think that both school and the household I lived in taught me to be polite.

The original sentence is incomplete because it does not contain a main verb after both school and the household. Also, from is unnecessary in this structure. Use both A and B + verb to make the sentence complete.

× It is sad to see the younger generation being so unpolite to people.

✓ It is sad to see the younger generation being so impolite to people.

The standard adjective is impolite, not unpolite. Use impolite when describing someone who is not polite. Learning common prefixes and standard word forms can help avoid this type of adjective error.

× When I was a child, I always thanked a person when they helped me or if I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please and if it was an older person, I will say Madame or Sir to them depending on gender.

✓ When I was a child, I always thanked people when they helped me. If I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please, and if the person was older, I would say Madam or Sir, depending on the person's gender.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas with commas, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas with a full stop or use suitable conjunctions. Organizing long answers into shorter sentences will make your speech clearer.

× When I was a child, I always thanked a person when they helped me or if I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please and if it was an older person, I will say Madame or Sir to them depending on gender.

✓ When I was a child, I always thanked people when they helped me. If I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please, and if the person was older, I would say Madam or Sir, depending on the person's gender.

Because you are describing a repeated habit in the past, will say should be would say or said. Would say is especially natural for repeated past actions after if the person was older.

× When I was a child, I always thanked a person when they helped me or if I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please and if it was an older person, I will say Madame or Sir to them depending on gender.

✓ When I was a child, I always thanked people when they helped me. If I wanted to ask a question, I always ended with please, and if the person was older, I would say Madam or Sir, depending on the person's gender.

The pronoun it does not clearly refer to the person mentioned in the sentence. Use the noun phrase the person or the pronoun they instead. Clear pronoun references help the listener understand who or what you mean.