Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly by explaining who taught you and what you learned. Avoid repetition and unclear expressions such as “older elderly people” and “as a Malay people handshake.” Use complete sentences and explain the cultural practice clearly. You could also mention that your parents or teachers taught you this behavior.

예시: My parents taught me to be polite by showing respect to older people. For example, in Malay culture, we greet them with a handshake and say “salam.” This is considered a respectful way to greet elderly people.

제안: Your answer is direct and relevant, but it is quite short and contains an unnatural phrase: “symbolises the respectfulness towards.” Say “shows respect for” instead. Add one specific reason or result, such as how politeness helps people build positive relationships. Use a linking word such as “because” to develop the answer.

예시: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it shows respect for other people, especially the elderly. It also helps us build positive relationships and avoid unnecessary misunderstandings.

제안: State your main idea clearly at the beginning and avoid the repeated, confusing structure “whenever whether.” Also, “a people” should be “a person,” and “polite language” is more natural than “a polite language.” Give two or three examples of occasions and finish the sentence properly. Linking words such as “for example” and “whether” can make the answer more coherent.

예시: We should be polite on every occasion, whether we are meeting someone for the first time or speaking to a close friend. For example, we should use respectful language at school, at work, and when talking to older people. Good manners make conversations more comfortable for everyone.

제안: You provide a relevant cultural example and a clear reason, but “In Islam way” should be “In Islam” or “According to Islamic tradition.” Use “greeted” instead of “make a salam,” and say “friends of the same age” rather than “our same age friends.” You could make the answer more natural by describing this as a habit you practiced as a child.

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting older people with “salam,” as we do in Islamic and Malay traditions. I also greeted friends of the same age in this way because it was considered respectful. This was a common habit in my family and community.

× When I was a child we were taught to give a handshake with older elderly people like in our tradition as a Malay people handshake and salam such asalam or Egum is a very polite thing to be said to Elderi.

✓ When I was a child, we were taught to shake hands with elderly people, as is customary in our Malay tradition. Shaking hands and saying salam, such as salam or Egum, are very polite ways to greet elders.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical connections. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the structure clearer. The phrase older elderly is also redundant, so elderly people is sufficient.

× handshake and salam such asalam or Egum is a very polite thing to be said to Elderi.

✓ Shaking hands and saying salam, such as salam or Egum, are very polite ways to greet elders.

The subject contains two coordinated actions, shaking hands and saying salam, so it is plural and requires are rather than is. The plural subject also requires ways rather than a singular thing.

× Yes, of course. I think being polite symbolises the respectfulness towards other people especially elderly people.

✓ Yes, of course. I think being polite symbolises respect for other people, especially elderly people.

The definite article the is unnecessary before the general idea of respect. When discussing respect in a general sense, use respect without an article.

× I believe in every occasion whenever whether it was your first time meeting a people or a second time or for many times we should have that kind of feeling to use a polite language, show a good hand gesture to every person we have met in the

✓ I believe that on every occasion, whether it is your first time meeting a person, your second time, or one of many times, we should use polite language and show a respectful hand gesture to every person we meet.

The original sentence has several conjunctions used together, including whenever and whether, which makes the structure difficult to follow. The corrected sentence uses whether...or to present the alternatives clearly. It also removes the unfinished ending, in the.

× I believe in every occasion whenever whether it was your first time meeting a people or a second time or for many times we should have that kind of feeling to use a polite language, show a good hand gesture to every person we have met in the

✓ I believe that on every occasion, whether it is your first time meeting a person, your second time, or one of many times, we should use polite language and show a respectful hand gesture to every person we meet.

The question asks about occasions in general, so the present tense is appropriate. Use it is and we meet instead of the past forms it was and we have met when describing a general situation.

× I believe in every occasion whenever whether it was your first time meeting a people or a second time or for many times we should have that kind of feeling to use a polite language, show a good hand gesture to every person we have met in the

✓ I believe that on every occasion, whether it is your first time meeting a person, your second time, or one of many times, we should use polite language and show a respectful hand gesture to every person we meet.

A people is incorrect when referring to one individual. Use a person for one individual. Also, many times is expressed more naturally here as one of many times.

× I believe in every occasion whenever whether it was your first time meeting a people or a second time or for many times we should have that kind of feeling to use a polite language, show a good hand gesture to every person we have met in the

✓ I believe that on every occasion, whether it is your first time meeting a person, your second time, or one of many times, we should use polite language and show a respectful hand gesture to every person we meet.

The conjunctions whenever and whether should not be used together in this sentence. The structure whether...or correctly connects the different possible occasions. Use and to connect the two actions, use polite language and show a hand gesture.

× In Islam way, we of course make a salam to the elderly people.

✓ In the Islamic tradition, we of course say salam to elderly people.

Use in the Islamic tradition rather than in Islam way. The preposition and expression are more grammatically appropriate for describing a religious or cultural practice. The phrase say salam to someone is also the correct construction for this greeting.

× In Islam way, we of course make a salam to the elderly people.

✓ In the Islamic tradition, we of course say salam to elderly people.

The phrase requires the before Islamic tradition because it refers to a specific tradition. However, the is not needed before elderly people when elderly people is used in a general sense.

× Even with our same age friends, we also give a salam towards each other because that's the most respectful way of treating things in Malay traditions.

✓ Even with friends of the same age, we also say salam to each other because that is the most respectful way to behave in Malay traditions.

Use say salam to each other rather than give a salam towards each other. The preposition to is used with say when identifying the person who receives the greeting. The phrase towards each other is not the appropriate prepositional construction here.

× Even with our same age friends, we also give a salam towards each other because that's the most respectful way of treating things in Malay traditions.

✓ Even with friends of the same age, we also say salam to each other because that is the most respectful way to behave in Malay traditions.

Same-age is a compound adjective and should be placed before friends with a hyphen, or the idea can be expressed as friends of the same age. The latter form is clearer and more natural in this sentence.