Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 시제 일치를 지켜야 합니다. 과거의 경험이므로 “teach”는 “taught”로, “when I eat”는 “when I ate”로 바꾸세요. 또한 “on table”과 “on the table”을 구분하고, 젓가락 사용은 예절을 배운 구체적인 예로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 답변은 부모님이 가르친 내용과 그 결과를 명확한 주제문과 연결어로 구성하면 더 효과적입니다.

예시: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, they taught me to use chopsticks properly and to wait until everyone was served before eating. They also reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” at the table.

제안: 의미는 전달되지만 문장 구조와 어휘 선택이 부자연스럽습니다. “the first impression of me decides my identity” 대신 “politeness helps create a good first impression”이라고 표현하고, “other people can think me”는 “other people will see me as respectful”로 고치세요. “because” 뒤의 이유를 완전한 문장으로 말하고, 결과를 설명하는 “so”를 적절히 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps create a good first impression. When we speak respectfully, other people are more likely to see us as friendly and considerate. As a result, it becomes easier to build positive relationships.

제안: 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 구체적인 상황을 두 가지 정도 제시하세요. “situations that I should be polite”는 “situations in which we should be polite”가 더 정확하고, “public meetings”는 “formal meetings” 또는 “public events”가 자연스럽습니다. “it desired my good impression”은 의미가 불분명하므로 “because I want to make a good first impression”으로 수정하고, 상황과 이유를 연결어로 분리하세요.

예시: We should be polite in formal meetings and when we meet someone for the first time. In a meeting, we should listen carefully and avoid interrupting others. Similarly, using polite language with a new person helps us make a good first impression.

제안: 과거 습관을 말하고 있으므로 동사 형태를 과거 또는 과거의 반복 습관에 맞게 사용해야 합니다. “I always greeting”은 “I always greeted”로, “my neighbourhood”는 사람을 의미할 때 “my neighbours”로, “I just being sincere”는 “I tried to be sincere”로 고치세요. 이웃에게 인사하고 감사함을 표현했다는 두 가지 행동을 연결어로 명확하게 설명하면 더 자연스럽고 구체적인 답변이 됩니다.

예시: As a child, I always greeted my neighbours whenever I saw them. I also thanked them when they helped me or gave me something. In this way, I tried to show that I was sincere and respectful.

× When I was a child, my parents usually teach me how to be polite.

✓ When I was a child, my parents usually taught me how to be polite.

The sentence refers to a repeated action in the past, so the past-tense form taught is required instead of the present-tense form teach.

× For example, when I eat something on table I learned how to use chopsticks and how to be polite on the table.

✓ For example, when I ate something at the table, I learned how to use chopsticks and how to behave politely at the table.

Because the student is describing childhood experiences, eat should be changed to ate. The phrase behave politely is also the natural verb expression for describing polite actions.

× For example, when I eat something on table I learned how to use chopsticks and how to be polite on the table.

✓ For example, when I ate something at the table, I learned how to use chopsticks and how to behave politely at the table.

The natural preposition for eating at a table is at, and the noun table needs the definite article the in this context.

× Yes, I think it's very important because the first impression of me decides my identity so if I can be polite other people can think me.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because my first impression affects how other people see me. If I am polite, other people can think well of me.

The expression think well of someone requires the preposition of. The phrase think me is not grammatically complete in this meaning.

× Yes, I think it's very important because the first impression of me decides my identity so if I can be polite other people can think me.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because my first impression affects how other people see me. If I am polite, other people can think well of me.

The original sentence joins several independent ideas without appropriate punctuation or structure. Dividing it into two sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clear.

× There are many situations that I should be polite, but one thing that comes to mind is public meetings and the first meeting with new person it desired my good impression.

✓ There are many situations in which I should be polite, but the occasions that come to mind are public meetings and first meetings with new people.

The preposition in is needed before which when referring to situations in which something happens. The phrase situations that I should be polite is incomplete without this preposition.

× There are many situations that I should be polite, but one thing that comes to mind is public meetings and the first meeting with new person it desired my good impression.

✓ There are many situations in which I should be polite, but the occasions that come to mind are public meetings and the first meeting with a new person.

A singular countable noun such as person requires an article. The indefinite article a is used because the person has not been previously identified.

× There are many situations that I should be polite, but one thing that comes to mind is public meetings and the first meeting with new person it desired my good impression.

✓ There are many situations in which I should be polite, but the occasions that come to mind are public meetings and first meetings with new people, which help me make a good impression.

The pronoun it does not have a clear or suitable antecedent, and it cannot logically refer to the plural occasions. Replacing it with which creates a clear relative clause.

× There are many situations that I should be polite, but one thing that comes to mind is public meetings and the first meeting with new person it desired my good impression.

✓ There are many situations in which I should be polite, but the occasions that come to mind are public meetings and first meetings with new people, which help me make a good impression.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incomplete structure after new person. The corrected version uses a clear subject, verb, and relative clause.

× I always greeting with my neighbourhood and every time I show them my gratitude and I just being sincere to other people.

✓ I always greeted my neighbors, and every time I showed them my gratitude and was sincere with other people.

The question asks about the student’s childhood, so the main verbs should be in the past tense: greeted, showed, and was.

× I always greeting with my neighbourhood and every time I show them my gratitude and I just being sincere to other people.

✓ I always greeted my neighbors, and every time I showed them my gratitude and was sincere with other people.

After the adverb always, a finite verb is needed. Greeting cannot be used alone as the main verb here, so it should be changed to the past-tense verb greeted.