Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is well organized and includes a clear reason and example. However, use “etiquette” instead of “educate,” and say “my parents, who taught me” rather than “my parents that taught me.” The phrase “greet adults, especially respectfully” is unnatural; say “greet adults respectfully.” You could also use a linking word such as “As a result” to connect your mother’s advice with its effect.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, who taught me basic etiquette from a young age. They encouraged me to greet adults respectfully and listen carefully before replying. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you.” As a result, I became more confident in social situations.

제안: This is a direct and effective answer with a clear explanation and relevant personal example. To sound more natural, replace “stand out positively” with “make a positive impression.” Also, add a linking word such as “Therefore” before the result, and avoid shifting from “you” to “I” by using one perspective consistently.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people make a positive impression and have smoother conversations. When we treat others respectfully, they are more likely to trust us and cooperate with us. For example, when I am polite in meetings, people usually give me more opportunities to speak and collaborate.

제안: You mention several appropriate situations, but the first sentence is difficult to understand because of grammar and word choice. Say “lecturers should be polite to students,” not “our lecture,” and use “pay attention” instead of “attend attention.” The phrase “encourage which improve learning” needs to be rewritten, for example, as “which can encourage them to participate and improve their learning.” Organize the answer with linking words such as “For instance” and “In addition.”

예시: We should be polite in almost every situation, especially in educational, professional, and social settings. For instance, lecturers should treat students respectfully because this can encourage them to participate and improve their learning. In addition, politeness at work and in social situations helps us build strong relationships and avoid misunderstandings.

제안: Your answer gives a specific and memorable example, which is effective. However, improve the grammar by saying “When I was a child, I showed my politeness…” and “I greeted the guests politely, used polite phrases…” The expression “the host of the function” is less natural than “the host of a school event,” and “with speaking” should be “when speaking” or “while speaking.” Use “such as” to introduce examples of polite phrases.

예시: When I was a child, I showed my politeness by respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, I once hosted a school event and greeted the guests warmly. I used polite phrases such as “please” and “thank you,” and I maintained a respectful tone while speaking.

× I learned to be polite from my parents that taught me basic educate and encouraged me to greet adults, especially respectfully and listen before replying.

✓ I learned to be polite from my parents, who taught me basic etiquette and encouraged me to greet adults respectfully and listen before replying.

The adverb respectfully should be placed immediately after the verb phrase it modifies: greet adults respectfully. This makes the meaning clear and avoids the awkward placement of especially respectfully.

× Politeness helps you stand out positively and make conversations smoother so people are more likely to respect you and want to work with you.

✓ Politeness helps you stand out positively and makes conversations smoother, so people are more likely to respect you and want to work with you.

The subject Politeness is third-person singular. Therefore, both coordinated verbs should have the third-person singular form: helps and makes. The conjunction so should also be preceded by a comma because it introduces a result.

× There are many occasions when we should be polite for example, our lecture should be polite to students so they feel respected and are more likely to attend attention and encourage which improve learning.

✓ There are many occasions when we should be polite. For example, our lecturers should be polite to students so that the students feel respected and are more likely to pay attention, which improves learning.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two complete ideas without suitable punctuation or a clear conjunction. It also contains an incomplete verb phrase, attend attention. The sentence should be divided and the second idea should be organized with a clear subject, verb, and result clause.

× There are many occasions when we should be polite for example, our lecture should be polite to students so they feel respected and are more likely to attend attention and encourage which improve learning.

✓ There are many occasions when we should be polite. For example, our lecturers should be polite to students so that the students feel respected and are more likely to pay attention, which improves learning.

The relative pronoun which refers to the singular idea of paying attention, so the verb should be improves, not improve. A singular subject or singular idea requires a singular verb.

× When I was a child I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, in school, I was once the host of the function and I greeted the guests politely used polite phrases like thank you and please and maintained a respectful tone with speaking.

✓ When I was a child, I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, at school, I was once the host of a function, and I greeted the guests politely, used polite phrases such as please and thank you, and maintained a respectful tone while speaking.

The indefinite article a is used because the function is being mentioned for the first time and is not a specific, previously identified function. The phrase a function is therefore more appropriate than the function.

× When I was a child I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, in school, I was once the host of the function and I greeted the guests politely used polite phrases like thank you and please and maintained a respectful tone with speaking.

✓ When I was a child, I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, at school, I was once the host of a function, and I greeted the guests politely, used polite phrases such as please and thank you, and maintained a respectful tone while speaking.

The verbs greeted, used, and maintained are items in a series, so they need parallel structure and punctuation. The original sentence also joins greeted and used without a conjunction or comma. Adding commas and and makes the structure clear and grammatical.

× When I was a child I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, in school, I was once the host of the function and I greeted the guests politely used polite phrases like thank you and please and maintained a respectful tone with speaking.

✓ When I was a child, I showed politeness by always respecting my elders and speaking calmly. For example, at school, I was once the host of a function, and I greeted the guests politely, used polite phrases such as please and thank you, and maintained a respectful tone while speaking.

With speaking is not the natural prepositional phrase for describing an action happening during speech. While speaking correctly expresses the meaning during the time that I was speaking. Also, at school is the more natural preposition for referring to the place where the event occurred.