Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes two clear sources of learning: your parents and school. However, the sentence structure is awkward, especially “I've been raised by my parents and also at school how to...” Use a direct topic sentence followed by specific examples, and replace “grownups and anybody” with the more natural phrase “adults and other people.”

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers at school. They taught me how to behave properly, respect other people, and speak politely to adults. For example, I was expected to greet visitors and listen carefully when someone was talking.

제안: You give a clear opinion, but “I was raised by that statement” is unnatural, and “the behavior the others gave me back” should be expressed as “the way others treat me in return.” Avoid the repetition in “I need to I still have to.” Explain the importance of politeness with one specific result, such as building trust or preventing conflict.

예시: Yes, definitely. I believe politeness is important because the way I treat people often affects how they treat me in return. It also helps create a respectful atmosphere and can prevent unnecessary arguments. Even when I am upset, I try to remain polite because it shows self-control.

제안: You answer the question directly and mention several appropriate occasions, including formal situations and first meetings. Improve the sentence by using clearer linking and more natural expressions: “even if we are close to someone” and “to prevent disagreements or problems.” Consider adding a specific example to make your answer more developed.

예시: We should be polite in formal situations and whenever we meet someone for the first time. We should also remain respectful with close friends and family, even though we feel comfortable with them. For instance, using a calm tone during a disagreement can help prevent the situation from becoming more serious.

제안: Your answer includes specific childhood behavior, which is good, but use the past tense consistently: “I always made sure” and “I tried.” “Dining tickets” is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is “table manners.” Also, “even sometimes I forgot it” should be “although I sometimes forgot them.”

예시: When I was a child, I always made sure to greet everyone at the dinner table and smile when I spoke to adults. I also tried to remember my table manners, such as waiting until everyone was served and using my napkin properly. Although I sometimes forgot, my parents reminded me politely.

× I've been raised by my parents and also at school how to carry myself and how to respect others along with how to speak with grownups and anybody.

✓ I was taught by my parents and at school how to carry myself, respect others, and speak to adults and everyone else.

The original sentence incorrectly combines the passive verb phrase I've been raised with the information being taught. Use was taught to introduce the skills and behaviors learned during childhood. The list should also be parallel: carry myself, respect others, and speak.

× I was raised by that statement.

✓ I was raised with that principle.

By usually identifies the person or method responsible for raising someone, whereas with is more suitable when referring to a belief or principle that influenced someone. Principle is also more natural than statement in this context.

× I believe that how I carry myself can result in the behavior the others gave me back.

✓ I believe that the way I carry myself can affect the way others treat me in return.

This describes a general belief, so use the present tense. Gave is past tense and does not fit the general meaning. The revised sentence uses natural present-tense phrasing.

× I believe that how I carry myself can result in the behavior the others gave me back.

✓ I believe that the way I carry myself can affect the way others treat me in return.

Do not use the definite article before others when referring to people in general. The others refers to a specific group already identified, but no such group has been mentioned here.

× And I need to I still have to be polite even when it's hard.

✓ I still have to be polite, even when it is difficult.

The original sentence contains two overlapping structures: I need to and I still have to. Use only one modal-like structure. The corrected sentence is complete and avoids unnecessary repetition.

× We should be polite in formal situations or with somebody we meet for the first time and even though we're close to somebody, we should still treat them with respect for preventing disagreement or problems.

✓ We should be polite in formal situations, with people we meet for the first time, and even when we are close to someone. We should still treat them with respect to prevent disagreements or problems.

The original sentence combines or, and, and even though in a confusing way. Use and even when to connect the ideas clearly. Dividing the statement into two sentences also makes the conjunctions easier to follow.

× We should be polite in formal situations or with somebody we meet for the first time and even though we're close to somebody, we should still treat them with respect for preventing disagreement or problems.

✓ We should be polite in formal situations, with people we meet for the first time, and even when we are close to someone. We should still treat them with respect to prevent disagreements or problems.

Use the infinitive to prevent to express purpose. For preventing is not the appropriate form after with respect in this sentence.

× At a dinner table I always make sure to greet everybody one by one and smile when I speak to adults.

✓ At the dinner table, I always made sure to greet everybody one by one and smile when I spoke to adults.

The question asks about what you did as a child, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Change make to made and speak to spoke.

× At a dinner table I always make sure to greet everybody one by one and smile when I speak to adults.

✓ At the dinner table, I always made sure to greet everybody one by one and smile when I spoke to adults.

The established expression for the place where people eat a meal is at the dinner table. The definite article the is used because the table is understood from the dining context.

× I try to keep dining tickets in my mind even sometimes I forgot it.

✓ I tried to keep dining tickets in mind, although I sometimes forgot them.

Because the answer refers to childhood, try should be changed to the past tense tried. Forgot is already past tense, and them agrees with the plural noun tickets.

× I try to keep dining tickets in my mind even sometimes I forgot it.

✓ I tried to keep dining tickets in mind, although I sometimes forgot them.

Sometimes should be placed before the main verb: I sometimes forgot. The phrase even sometimes is not a natural adverbial placement. Although clearly introduces the contrast between trying to remember and occasionally forgetting.