Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence. The first sentence is difficult to understand because several ideas are joined together without correct grammar. Explain that your parents, relatives, friends, and children's television influenced you, and use accurate forms such as “my parents taught me” and “children’s TV programs.”

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to greet people, say “please” and “thank you,” and listen when others were speaking. I also picked up some good manners from my relatives and children’s TV programs.

제안: This is a clear and relevant answer with a direct opinion and supporting reasons. To sound more natural, say “build strong relationships” instead of “make strong relationships,” and avoid repeating “being polite” and “being kind” too closely. You could also add one specific example to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important because it shows respect and kindness. Good manners help people build stronger relationships and make everyday interactions more pleasant. For example, saying “thank you” can make someone feel appreciated, even after a small favor.

제안: Give a direct answer first and then mention several specific situations, such as meeting strangers, speaking to older people, or communicating at work. The sentence needs better grammar and punctuation: use “on every occasion,” “we cannot be unkind,” and “we can remain silent or calmly object.” Also, avoid suggesting that politeness is unnecessary whenever someone insults you; explain that you can remain respectful while defending yourself.

예시: We should be polite on almost every occasion, especially when meeting new people, speaking to older people, or dealing with customers and colleagues. Even if someone is rude to us, we should try to remain calm and respectful. However, we can politely disagree or leave the conversation if the person becomes offensive.

제안: You include relevant examples, but the answer should use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood. Replace “I always say” with “I always said,” “I was telling” with “I said,” and “thank people” with “thanked people.” Use linking words and clearer phrasing to make the examples flow naturally.

예시: As a child, I always said hello and smiled when I met people. If I wanted something, I said “please,” and I thanked people when they helped me. I also tried to listen carefully and avoid interrupting adults.

× I don't remember how I learned to be polite and what politeness means how adults treat each other under guidance from my parents, relatives and friends taught me to be polite.

✓ I don't remember exactly how I learned to be polite, but my parents, relatives, and friends taught me how adults should treat one another.

The original sentence combines several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use but to connect the two main ideas, and use taught me how to introduce the information about how adults treat one another.

× I also picked up some habits from TV program for children.

✓ I also picked up some habits from a TV program for children.

TV program is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a because the program has not been mentioned before.

× Being kind and helpful to each other helps make strong relationships and make daily life more pleasant.

✓ Being kind and helpful to each other helps us build strong relationships and makes daily life more pleasant.

The subject Being kind and helpful is singular. Therefore, the coordinated verb must be makes, not make. The sentence also needs us after helps to make the meaning clearer.

× In every occasion we should be polite unless someone insults us so we can not behave kind to that person we can be silent or object.

✓ On every occasion, we should be polite unless someone insults us.

Use on with occasions when referring to particular situations or events. The preposition in is not appropriate in the phrase in every occasion.

× In every occasion we should be polite unless someone insults us so we can not behave kind to that person we can be silent or object.

✓ On every occasion, we should be polite. If someone insults us, we do not have to behave kindly toward that person; we can remain silent or object.

Behave is a verb, so it should be modified by the adverb kindly, not the adjective kind. The phrase behave kindly toward someone is the appropriate expression.

× In every occasion we should be polite unless someone insults us so we can not behave kind to that person we can be silent or object.

✓ On every occasion, we should be polite. If someone insults us, we do not have to behave kindly toward that person; we can remain silent or object.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence because several independent ideas are joined without proper punctuation or conjunctions. Divide it into shorter sentences and use a semicolon to connect the final closely related ideas.

× I always say hello and smile and if I have a request from someone I was telling please and thank people if they do something for me.

✓ I always said hello and smiled. If I had a request from someone, I said please and thanked people when they did something for me.

The question asks about behavior in the past, so the verbs should be in the simple past. Use said, smiled, had, thanked, and did instead of present or incorrectly formed verb phrases.

× I always say hello and smile and if I have a request from someone I was telling please and thank people if they do something for me.

✓ I always said hello and smiled. If I had a request from someone, I said please and thanked people when they did something for me.

The original sentence contains too many clauses joined together without clear punctuation. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the conditional statement and the past actions easier to understand.