Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly by saying that your parents taught you through their example. Avoid repetition such as “greatest, greatest,” use the past tense consistently (“showed” and “imitated”), and replace the unnatural phrase “as I tagged along and imitate” with “when I accompanied them and copied their behavior.” Add one specific example to make the answer more developed.

예시: I mainly learned to be polite by observing my parents. They showed me how to speak respectfully and behave appropriately when we were with other people. For example, I copied the way they greeted guests and thanked others.

제안: Your opinion and reason are clear, but the answer contains repetition (“need need”) and an incorrect expression (“needs some kind of role”). Use a more natural structure such as “society needs rules and good manners.” Also, connect your ideas more smoothly and give a concrete result or example of politeness.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important because people are social beings. Good manners help us communicate respectfully, avoid unnecessary conflicts, and cooperate more effectively. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can make everyday interactions much more pleasant.

제안: You answer the question clearly and make a useful contrast between being alone and interacting with others. However, the opening is a sentence fragment, and “plays a great role” is less natural than “is especially important.” Start with a complete topic sentence and mention a few specific situations, such as at work, in public, or when speaking to older people.

예시: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in formal or public situations. For instance, it is important to show good manners at work, when speaking to older people, and when asking someone for help. When we are completely alone, of course, politeness is not really necessary.

제안: The main idea is relevant, but correct the repetition (“to to”), use the past tense because the question asks about childhood, and explain the cultural term more accurately. “Keigo” is the usual spelling, and you can say that it involves changing your language according to the listener’s status or the level of formality. Add a specific example, such as speaking respectfully to teachers or older relatives.

예시: As a child, I tried to use polite language and show respect to adults. In Japanese, this is called “keigo,” which means changing the level of formality depending on who you are speaking to. For example, I used more respectful expressions when talking to my teachers and older relatives.

× Mostly my parents were my greatest, greatest example.

✓ Mostly, my parents were my greatest examples.

The subject parents is plural, so the plural noun examples is needed instead of the singular noun example. The repeated word greatest should also appear only once.

× They show me how to speak and how to behave politely as I tagged along and imitate.

✓ They showed me how to speak and how to behave politely as I tagged along and imitated.

The question asks about learning as a child, so the answer should use the past tense. Show changes to showed, and imitate changes to imitated to maintain consistent past-tense narration.

× I think being polite is very important because humans are supposed to be social animals and a society needs some kind of role and at the same time need need manners and politeness to interact and collaborate with each other.

✓ I think being polite is very important because humans are supposed to be social animals, and a society needs some kind of role and, at the same time, needs manners and politeness to interact and collaborate with each other.

The subject society is singular, so the verb must be needs, not need. The repeated word need should be used only once. When a singular subject is connected to two verbs, both verbs should agree with that singular subject.

× One thing is to to speak politely using polite language and showing respect for others.

✓ One thing I did was speak politely, using polite language and showing respect for others.

The question asks what you did as a child, so the answer should refer to a past action. The phrase is changes to did was, and the repeated to is removed. The structure one thing I did was speak is a natural way to describe a past action.