Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答切题，并使用了父母示范和具体礼貌用语作为例子，内容方向很好。但“plight”应为“politeness”，而“did a good example”应改为“set a good example”。注意使用正确搭配，如“ask someone to do me a favor”，并避免最后一句未完成。建议先直接回答，再用两个完整句子说明父母如何教你。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, who set a good example for me. They taught me to say “please” when asking for something and “thank you” when someone helped me. They also reminded me to greet people politely and listen when others were speaking.

제안: 回答观点明确，也提到了第一印象和与陌生人建立关系两个理由。但“leave a great first impression to others”应改为“make a good first impression”，而“make a faster response and faster relationship”表达不自然，建议改为“encourage people to respond positively and build relationships more quickly”。可加入一个具体场景，使观点更有说服力，并减少重复使用“being polite”。

예시: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it helps us make a good first impression and encourages people to respond positively. This is especially useful when meeting strangers, as polite language can help people feel more comfortable and build a relationship more quickly.

제안: 回答提供了商务会议、经理、同事和主管等相关场景，但“when you connect it with some important person”以及“when you connect with a supervisor”不符合自然英语，应改为“when speaking to important people”或“when dealing with a supervisor”。不要只强调“重要人物”；实际上在所有正式场合以及与陌生人交流时都应礼貌。建议使用“for example”和“also”清楚连接不同场景。

예시: We should be polite whenever we are in a formal or unfamiliar situation. For example, during a business meeting, we should speak respectfully to our managers and colleagues. We should also be polite when talking to a supervisor or dealing with customers because this shows professionalism.

제안: 回答具体且有多个例子，包括分享零食、给老人让座和帮助老师，内容较充实。不过“plight”仍应改为“politeness”，应说“shared my snacks with my classmates”，而不是“shared ... to”。“in the bus”更自然的说法是“on the bus”；“carried something to the teacher”应明确说明是“carried the teacher’s books”。建议将例子按逻辑连接，避免信息堆叠。

예시: As a child, I showed my politeness by helping and sharing with others. For instance, I shared my snacks with classmates when they were hungry. I also gave up my seat for elderly passengers on the bus and sometimes helped my teacher carry books.

× For example, they always told me I must say thank you when others help me and I should say please when I want some others to do me a favor.

✓ For example, they always told me that I must say thank you when others help me and that I should say please when I want someone else to do me a favor.

“Some others”不能自然地指代“某个人”。这里应使用“someone else”，表示“别人、某个人”。在“told me”后加“that”也能使两个宾语从句的结构更加清晰。

× Of course, I think being polite can help people to leave a great first impression to others.

✓ Of course, I think being polite can help people to leave a great first impression on others.

固定搭配是“make/leave a good or great impression on someone”，表示“给某人留下好印象”，因此应使用介词“on”，而不是“to”。

× Also, being polite can especially make a faster response and faster relationship with strangers.

✓ Also, being polite can lead to faster responses and help people build relationships more quickly with strangers.

“Faster”不能自然地修饰“relationship”，因为“关系”通常不是“快”或“慢”。表达行为速度时，应使用副词“quickly”修饰“build relationships”。此外，“lead to”更适合表示“导致某种结果”。注意“responses”使用复数，因为这里泛指多种回应。

× Well, I think we should be polite when you connect it with some important person or in some important meeting.

✓ Well, I think we should be polite when we interact with an important person or attend an important meeting.

主句的主语是“we”，从句中不应突然改成“you”。“it”没有明确的指代对象，因此应删除。表达“与某人交流”时，使用“interact with an important person”更准确。

× Well, I think we should be polite when you connect it with some important person or in some important meeting.

✓ Well, I think we should be polite when we interact with an important person or attend an important meeting.

“important”以元音音素开头，所以前面应使用不定冠词“an”，不能使用“some”。可数名词“meeting”在这里是单数泛指，也需要使用“an”。

× For example, in a business meeting you should be polite to your manager or colleagues to show respect.

✓ For example, in a business meeting, you should be polite to your manager or colleagues to show respect.

原句的介词使用基本正确；这里主要补充逗号以使句子结构更清楚。地点或情境短语“in a business meeting”放在句首时，后面通常加逗号。

× And also when you connect with a supervisor, you must be polite to him.

✓ Also, when you interact with a supervisor, you must be polite to them.

“you”与前文“we”不一致。为了保持主语一致，应使用“we”。另外，在不知道对方性别时，用单数“they/them”比“him”更合适。

× For example, I often shared my snacks to my classmates when they were hungry.

✓ For example, I often shared my snacks with my classmates when they were hungry.

固定搭配是“share something with someone”，表示“与某人分享某物”，因此应使用“with”，而不是“to”。

× And also in the bus I offered my seat to elderly people to show my respect.

✓ Also, on the bus, I offered my seat to elderly people to show my respect.

乘坐公共汽车时，英语通常使用“on the bus”，而不是“in the bus”。“offer my seat to someone”搭配正确。

× And sometimes I carried something to the teacher.

✓ Sometimes, I carried something for the teacher.

如果想表达“为老师拿东西”，应使用“carry something for someone”。“To”表示方向或目的地，不适合表达“为某人做某事”。