Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 첫 문장에서 부모님과 학교에서 예절을 배웠다고 직접 답하세요. ‘a lot of education’, ‘it was really naturally’, ‘I run from’은 부자연스럽거나 문법적으로 틀렸으므로 ‘I was taught’, ‘naturally’, ‘learned from’과 같은 정확한 표현을 사용해야 합니다. 또한 ‘as a Korean’은 문맥상 불필요하거나 ‘Korean culture’처럼 명확하게 표현하고, 부모님에게 배운 구체적인 예를 하나 추가하세요.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers at kindergarten. They taught me to greet adults properly, use polite language, and say thank you. In Korean culture, children are expected to show respect to older people, so I picked it up naturally from daily life.

제안: ‘a good thing for all of the world’ 대신 ‘important in every society’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 질문에 대한 이유를 먼저 제시하고, 아시아와 서양 국가를 비교할 때 ‘in Asian countries’와 ‘compared with Western countries’처럼 정확한 전치사와 비교 구조를 사용해야 합니다. ‘matter’는 동사이므로 여기서는 ‘matters more’ 또는 ‘is emphasized more’가 적절합니다.

예시: Yes, I think politeness is important because it shows respect and helps people communicate smoothly. It is especially emphasized in Asian countries such as Korea, China, and Japan, where people are expected to respect their elders. However, I believe it is valuable in every society.

제안: 두 가지 상황을 제시한 점은 좋지만, ‘when you treat on wallpaper’는 의미가 불분명하므로 의도에 맞게 ‘when you talk to people online’ 또는 ‘when you visit someone’s home’처럼 정확히 표현해야 합니다. ‘when you meet your boyfriend’s parents’ 뒤에 ‘because you want to make a good impression’처럼 구체적인 이유를 연결하세요. ‘it’s also not only good thing’은 ‘It is not only good manners; it also shows respect’로 수정하면 자연스럽습니다.

예시: We should be polite when meeting someone for the first time, especially when meeting a partner’s parents. We should also be polite when speaking to teachers, elderly people, or customer-service staff. This is because good manners show respect and help us make a positive impression.

제안: 과거의 행동을 묻는 질문이므로 현재형 ‘I try’가 아니라 과거형 ‘I tried’ 또는 ‘I used to’를 사용해야 합니다. ‘remember my childhood about like associated with’는 불필요하고 부자연스러우므로 바로 행동을 말하세요. 인사하기, 웃으며 대답하기, 존댓말 사용하기 등 구체적인 행동을 2~3개 제시하고, ‘say yes a lot’ 대신 ‘answer politely’처럼 의미가 정확한 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults whenever I met them. I also smiled, listened carefully, and answered them politely instead of interrupting. At home, I used respectful language when speaking to my parents and grandparents.

× Well, that is a lot of education from maybe kindergarten.

✓ Well, I received a lot of guidance about politeness, perhaps starting in kindergarten.

The question asks about how you learned politeness as a child, so the answer should use the past tense. Use received instead of is. Also, starting in kindergarten expresses the time when the learning began more naturally.

× Well, that is a lot of education from maybe kindergarten.

✓ Well, I received a lot of guidance about politeness, perhaps starting in kindergarten.

Use in with kindergarten when referring to the period when something began. Starting in kindergarten is the natural prepositional phrase.

× So it yeah, it was really naturally to learn how to be polite.

✓ So, it was really natural to learn how to be polite.

Natural is an adjective that describes it. Naturally is an adverb and cannot be used after was in this sentence. Remove the unnecessary it at the beginning as well.

× Umm, as a Korean.

✓ As a Korean, I learned about politeness from my parents and teachers.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it has no main verb. Add a subject and a verb to make it a complete sentence.

× So yeah, usually I run from my parents and school, I guess.

✓ So, I usually learned it from my parents and at school, I guess.

Because you are describing childhood learning, use the past-tense verb learned rather than the present-tense verb run.

× So yeah, usually I run from my parents and school, I guess.

✓ So, I usually learned it from my parents and at school, I guess.

Use from with parents and at with school. The phrase learned it from my parents and at school correctly shows the sources and place of learning.

× Yeah, I think being polite is really important and good thing for all of the world,

✓ Yeah, I think being polite is really important and a good thing around the world,

Good thing is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. The phrase around the world is also the natural expression for referring to the whole world.

× Yeah, I think being polite is really important and good thing for all of the world,

✓ Yeah, I think being polite is really important and a good thing around the world,

Use around rather than for when referring to places throughout the world. The correct phrase is around the world.

× Umm in there it is much more matter than Western count countries.

✓ It matters much more there than in Western countries.

Use matters as the present-tense verb because the subject it is singular. The sentence is making a general statement, so the present tense is appropriate.

× Umm in there it is much more matter than Western count countries.

✓ It matters much more there than in Western countries.

When comparing two locations, use than in Western countries. The phrase more matter is incorrect because matter must be used as the verb: matters much more.

× It's also not only good thing, but also it's showing respect for them.

✓ It is not only a good thing but also shows respect for them.

Good thing is a singular countable noun and therefore needs the article a. The corrected sentence uses a good thing.

× It's also not only good thing, but also it's showing respect for them.

✓ It is not only a good thing but also shows respect for them.

This sentence expresses a general fact, so use the simple present shows instead of the present continuous is showing. The subject it is already understood for shows.

× So yeah, those occasions.

✓ So, those are the occasions when you should be polite.

Those occasions is only a noun phrase and does not contain a verb. Add are and the rest of the clause to make a complete sentence.

× Well, I try to remember my childhood about like associated with the polite experience.

✓ Well, I tried to think of polite experiences from my childhood.

The question asks what you did as a child, so use the past-tense verb tried. The original present-tense verb try does not match the past-time context.

× Well, I try to remember my childhood about like associated with the polite experience.

✓ Well, I tried to think of polite experiences from my childhood.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incomplete structure: remember my childhood about like associated with. Use the clearer structure think of polite experiences from my childhood.

× I might be like umm, I just say hi a lot and being smiley person and say yes a lot.

✓ I would say hello a lot, smile, and say yes a lot.

The answer describes past behavior, so use past-tense forms such as would say and the coordinated verb forms smile and say. Keep all verbs in the same grammatical pattern.

× I might be like umm, I just say hi a lot and being smiley person and say yes a lot.

✓ I would say hello a lot, be a smiley person, and say yes a lot.

Smiley person is a singular countable noun phrase, so it requires the article a. The corrected version also uses be to keep the verb pattern parallel.