Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で分かりやすいですが、表現が不自然で情報が不足しています。まず“behave myself”は“behave”だけか“behave myself”の使い方がやや不自然です。また“it helped me gain”の後に何を得たのかが欠けています。さらに、関連する詳細（具体的な行動や教え方の例）を1〜2文で付け加え、接続語（for example、so、thereforeなど）を使って論理的につなげてください。文の長さは最大5文に抑え、語彙は“strict”の説明として“disciplined”や“emphasized good manners”などを使うとより自然です。

예시: My homeroom teacher and my parents taught me good manners from a young age. For example, they emphasized saying “please” and “thank you” and correcting rude behaviour immediately. Because of their guidance, I became more respectful and confident when talking to adults and peers.

제안: 回答は要点を押さえていますが、語順や表現を自然にするとさらに良くなります。例えば“it is because”よりも“because”で始めるか、“I think so because…”の形にすると自然です。加えて、理由を一つだけでなく具体例や結果（e.g. better teamwork, fewer misunderstandings）を付けて説明すると説得力が増します。短い接続語（for instance, which means, so）を使って論理を整えてください。

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps you make friends and build strong relationships. For instance, politeness makes conversations smoother and reduces misunderstandings at work or school.

제안: この回答は意味が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります（“bright”は場面に合わない、繰り返し“at my at our”や不完全文）。まず質問には複数の場面（workplaces, family gatherings, formal eventsなど）を列挙して回答するのが良いです。次に、接続語（for example, especially）を使って具体例を示し、結果を一文で締めてください。文法を整え、1〜3文で簡潔に示しましょう。

예시: We should be polite in many situations, especially at work, during family gatherings and at formal events. For example, being polite at work helps maintain good professional relationships and prevents conflicts.

제안: 時制や文の完成度に問題があります（“I try to”は過去形に、断片的な文を結合）。まず過去形で主語・述語を整え、具体的な行動（say hello、help elders、use polite phrasesなど）を1〜2例挙げてください。接続語（for example, also）で文をつなぎ、最後にその行動の効果（made people feel welcomeなど）を述べると良いです。

예시: When I was a child, I always tried to greet people politely by saying “hello” and “good morning.” For example, I would help elders carry things and use polite phrases, which made others feel respected and comfortable.

× My homeroom teacher and parents taught me how to behave myself.

✓ My homeroom teacher and parents taught me how to behave.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary here because 'behave' does not require a reflexive object. Use the simple verb 'behave' to form the correct phrase 'behave well' or 'behave' depending on context. Suggestion: say 'behave well' if you want to emphasize manner.

× They were strict but it helped me gain.

✓ They were strict, but it helped me a lot.

The verb 'gain' needs an object and 'helped me' requires clarification. 'Helped me a lot' expresses the intended meaning. Use a comma before 'but' when joining two independent clauses.

× Yes I do, it is because being polite is the key to make friends with others and build bonds.

✓ Yes I do. It is because being polite is the key to making friends and building bonds.

After 'key to' we need a noun or a gerund (verb + -ing). Use 'making' and 'building' instead of the base forms 'make' and 'build'. Also split into two sentences or use a semicolon for clarity.

× We should be bright when we are at my at our workplaces.

✓ We should be polite when we are at our workplaces.

'Bright' is not the correct adjective for behaving well; use 'polite'. Also the phrase contained a duplicated possessive 'my at our'; correct to 'our workplaces'.

× If we are not polite. We could.

✓ If we are not polite, we could lose opportunities or relationships.

Fragments: 'If we are not polite.' is a subordinate clause and cannot stand alone. Complete the sentence by adding the main clause. Provide concrete consequences like 'lose opportunities or relationships' to finish the conditional.

× When I was a child, I try to. Say hello to others. This is very effective way to.

✓ When I was a child, I tried to say hello to others. This was a very effective way to make friends.

'When I was a child' sets past time, so use past tense 'tried' not present 'try'. Also 'try to.' and 'Say hello to others.' were sentence fragments; combine into one sentence. 'This is very effective way to.' needs article and object: use 'This was a very effective way to make friends.'