Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it repeats ideas and could be more concise and varied. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (a brief example of what your parents did) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid redundancy such as repeating "that is one thing" and "when I was a child."

예시: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For example, they always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and they treated others respectfully, which I tried to copy. Because of their example, politeness became a natural habit for me.

제안: Your main idea is relevant but the sentence is awkward and has grammatical errors. Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with a concise reason and one example. Use linking words like "because" and avoid rhetorical questions that sound unclear. Improve grammar (e.g., "why not share it with the world" or "so why not share it").

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it creates a more harmonious society. For example, if adults model good manners for children, those children are more likely to treat others kindly in the future.

제안: The response is direct but overly repetitive. Give one clear topic sentence, then briefly explain or give examples of specific occasions (e.g., at work, with strangers, and with family) using a linking word to add detail. Avoid repeating the same phrase twice.

예시: We should be polite at all times, especially at work, when meeting strangers, and when interacting with elders. For instance, being courteous at work helps build good relationships with colleagues and clients.

제안: This answer gives a specific cultural example, which is very good. Improve tense consistency (use past tense when talking about childhood), and organize into a topic sentence plus a concise supporting detail. Add a linking word to connect the cultural description to its purpose (respect).

예시: When I was a child in the Philippines, I showed politeness by performing the "mano" or blessing gesture: I would take an elder's hand and touch it to my forehead. This gesture was a clear sign of respect and reinforced family values.

× That is one thing that they taught me when I was a child.

✓ That is one thing that they taught me when I were a child.

Incorrect: original uses 'was' with 'I' in a subjunctive-like or mistaken context. However, standard past tense for factual statement is 'was'. The original sentence is actually correct; no 'there be' issue applies. Suggested correction was incorrect. Correct form should remain 'That is one thing that they taught me when I was a child.' Use 'was' for first-person singular past."

× They are both Christians and they set an example for me and I think that is why I grew up polite.

✓ They are both Christians, and they set an example for me, and I think that is why I grew up polite.

The sentence has run-on structure and comma needs; tense usage is consistent (present 'are' for current state, past 'set' for past action). Correction adds punctuation for clarity. Suggest using commas or splitting into two sentences for readability.

× I do. I think being polite is very important because that will help us make a better place for our children and politeness is free and why not we can't share it to the world?

✓ I do. I think being polite is very important because it will help us make a better place for our children, politeness is free, so why not share it with the world?

Problems: awkward pronoun 'that' and modal phrasing and question form. Replace 'that' with 'it' to refer to 'being polite'. Combine clauses with appropriate conjunctions and change 'can't share it to the world?' to affirmative 'why not share it with the world?' Use 'with' not 'to' for sharing.

× We should be polite at all times. As I said, being polite is free, so we should be polite at all times.

✓ We should be polite at all times. As I said, being polite is free, so we should always be courteous.

Repetition of same idea creates redundancy. Replace repeated clause with a synonym to improve style. Tense and structure are otherwise fine.

× As a Filipino growing up in the Philippines, I do show my politeness to people, especially those that are older than me.

✓ As a Filipino who grew up in the Philippines, I showed my politeness to people, especially those who are older than me.

Mismatch between 'growing up' (continuous) and simple past context. For describing past behavior as a child, use past tense 'grew up' and 'showed'. Use 'who' not 'that' for people.

× I do manupo or we do bless, I get their hand and tap it on my forehead and that is our form of respect

✓ I do manupo or we bless; I take their hand and tap it on my forehead, and that is our form of respect.

Verb forms need correction: use 'bless' not 'do bless' in this context, 'get their hand' should be 'take their hand'. Add punctuation to join clauses correctly. 'Tap it on my forehead' is fine. Use present simple to describe customary actions.