Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct small errors (e.g., remove duplicated "or").

예시: I learned to be polite mainly by watching my parents. For example, they always greeted the building security guards and treated restaurant staff with kindness, so I copied their behavior and learned that small gestures matter.

제안: Good content and clear opinion. Improve coherence by using a linking word and tighten phrasing. Remove unnecessary commas and avoid hedging words like "I think" when you already stated an opinion.

예시: Yes, being polite is very important because everyone deserves respect. Moreover, small polite actions—like saying thank you or smiling—can lift someone's mood and encourage more positive interactions.

제안: Avoid repetition and fillers ("To be honest", repeated "I think"). Give a concise topic sentence and one or two clear examples with a linking phrase. Keep within 3–4 sentences for fluency.

예시: We should be polite in all situations, not just special occasions. For instance, always saying thank you to service staff and holding the door for others shows respect in everyday life.

제안: Good specific examples. Improve grammar consistency (use past simple or habitual past clearly) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Make sentences slightly shorter and remove redundant phrases.

예시: As a child, I usually greeted the building's security guard by saying "Good morning." I also thanked waiters at restaurants and tried to hold heavy doors for others to show respect.

× I think I've learned to be polite through living examples from my parents since I was a kid.

✓ I think I learned to be polite through living examples from my parents since I was a kid.

Mixing present perfect ('I've learned') with a definite past time expression ('since I was a kid') can be awkward; use simple past 'learned' to indicate a past learning that began and continued during childhood. Alternatively, use 'have learned' with 'since' if you mean the learning continues to the present: 'I think I have learned to be polite from my parents since I was a kid.' Be consistent: choose simple past for completed past or present perfect for actions with present relevance. Suggestion: Use simple past 'learned' for a past experience, or rephrase to 'I have learned from my parents since I was a kid' if you want present relevance.

× They would always greet our security guards or or even as just a staff or waiters in their restaurants, they would be so nice to them and I learned that from.

✓ They would always greet our security guards or even the staff and waiters in restaurants; they were always so nice to them, and I learned that behavior from them.

Sentence has repetition ('or or'), incorrect phrase ordering ('as just a staff'), unclear reference and a hanging preposition/phrase ('I learned that from'). Also run-on structure with comma splices. Correction fixes word order ('the staff and waiters'), removes repetition, clarifies who 'they' refers to, and completes the final phrase with an object ('from them'). Suggestion: Break long ideas into shorter clauses and ensure each pronoun has a clear antecedent.

× I think it is important to be polite as everyone deserves to be treated with kindness and respect.

✓ I think it is important to be polite, as everyone deserves to be treated with kindness and respect.

Missing comma before a dependent clause makes the sentence harder to read. Grammatically it's acceptable, but punctuation improves clarity. No major grammatical error type from the list except punctuation/structure. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'as' when it introduces a reason clause.

× Apart from that, I also see how positively, it can affect other people, even though it might just be a small gesture of courtesy, it really matters.

✓ Apart from that, I also see how it can positively affect other people. Even if it is just a small gesture of courtesy, it really matters.

Original sentence has misplaced adverb placement ('how positively, it can affect') and comma splices. Moving 'positively' after 'can' reads naturally. Splitting into two sentences avoids run-on and clarifies the contrast. Suggestion: Place adverbs close to the verb they modify and avoid comma splices by using periods or conjunctions.

× To be honest, I couldn't think of an occasion that we shouldn't be polite.

✓ To be honest, I can't think of an occasion when we shouldn't be polite.

Tense mismatch: 'couldn't' suggests past ability; the question is general/present, so use present 'can't'. Also 'that' with 'occasion' is less natural than 'when'. Suggestion: Use present tense for general statements and 'when' for occasions/time.

× I think I think as I said before, everyone deserves to be treated with kindness and respect.

✓ As I said before, everyone deserves to be treated with kindness and respect.

Redundant repetition 'I think I think' and awkward clause ordering. Remove duplication and start directly with the reference to the earlier statement for conciseness. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same phrase; be concise.

× So we should always say thank you and we should always hold the door. It's not because of the occasion

✓ So we should always say thank you and hold doors for others; it's not dependent on the occasion.

Original ends with a fragment 'It's not because of the occasion' which is informal and unclear. 'Hold the door' is acceptable but 'hold doors' or 'hold the door for others' is more natural. Clarify the ending clause to show meaning: not dependent on occasion. Suggestion: Use complete clauses and clarify the subject of general statements.

× I always greet the security guard of our building.

✓ I always greeted the security guard of our building.

Question asked about childhood ('What did you do... as a child?'), so past tense is required. 'Always greet' is present; change to past 'greeted' to match timeframe. Suggestion: Use past tense to describe habitual actions in the past.

× I would say good morning to them and apart from that I also say thank you to the waiters at different restaurants and try to hold the door, even though it might be heavy for me as a kid.

✓ I would say 'Good morning' to them; apart from that, I also said thank you to waiters at different restaurants and tried to hold the door, even though it might have been heavy for me as a kid.

Mixes conditional/modal 'would' with present tense verbs 'say' and 'try' while describing past habitual behavior. For past habits, use past tense: 'said' and 'tried.' Also include appropriate reporting of spoken greeting with quotes and adjust 'might be' to 'might have been' to match past reference. Suggestion: When describing past repeated actions, keep verbs in the past tense and be consistent with modals and aspect.