Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and correct grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “for example,” “also”).

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher taught our class how to greet adults respectfully. These reminders helped me form good habits.

제안: This answer is strong. To reach a higher score, add a brief personal example or consequence to make it more specific and use a linking phrase like “for instance” to connect idea and example.

예시: Absolutely. Being polite shows respect and helps build strong relationships. For instance, when I politely introduced myself at a networking event, people were more willing to talk to me, which led to useful contacts.

제안: Fix word choice errors and be more specific. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “politeness” not “politics”) and add a linking word to list occasions clearly. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

예시: We should be polite in many situations, such as when meeting new people, speaking with elders, and in formal settings like job interviews. Even with close friends and family, maintaining basic politeness—like saying thank you—keeps relationships respectful.

제안: Correct vocabulary and phrasing, and give one specific anecdote to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word such as “for example” or “also” to connect points.

예시: When I was a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults and using respectful language. For example, I always said “good morning” to my grandparents and wrote thank-you notes when I received gifts, which my parents encouraged.

× They usually reminded me to say thank you and please when talking with talking to other people.

✓ They usually reminded me to say 'thank you' and 'please' when talking to other people.

The original sentence contains a redundant phrase 'with talking to' which is incorrect. Use the preposition 'to' with 'talking' or simply 'when talking to other people'. Also punctuate phrases 'thank you' and 'please' for clarity. Suggestion: remove the extra word 'with' and keep 'when talking to other people'.

× I also talked to me about good manners and how to behave politely.

✓ They also talked to me about good manners and how to behave politely.

The subject is incorrect: 'I also talked to me' incorrectly uses the reflexive pronoun and means the speaker spoke to themselves. The intended meaning is that teachers/parents spoke to the student, so use 'They' as the subject. Suggestion: ensure the subject matches the agent of the action and use 'talked to me'.

× ...communicating in formal setting.

✓ ...communicating in a formal setting.

The noun 'setting' requires an article when singular; without it the phrase is ungrammatical. Use 'a formal setting' or plural 'formal settings'. Suggestion: add the indefinite article 'a' before 'formal setting'.

× Even with close friends and family, we should still maintain basic politics.

✓ Even with close friends and family, we should still maintain basic politeness.

The word 'politics' is a noun referring to government or affairs; the intended meaning is the quality 'politeness'. Use the correct noun 'politeness'. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with 'politeness' or phrase 'basic manners'.

× When I was a little girl, I often showed politics by greeting adults when I met them and using respectful language when talking to older people.

✓ When I was a little girl, I often showed politeness by greeting adults when I met them and by using respectful language when talking to older people.

Again 'politics' is the wrong word; use 'politeness'. Additionally, parallel structure is improved by repeating 'by' before both gerund phrases: 'by greeting' and 'by using'. Suggestion: replace the noun and maintain parallel gerund forms for clarity.