Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn và đúng ngữ pháp. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (ví dụ: “I learned politeness mainly from my family and school.”), sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản (e.g., “for example”, “also”) và tránh lặp từ/thuật ngữ sai. Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and grandparents. For example, my parents always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher taught us to listen when others speak. I also learned to show respect to elders by greeting them politely.

제안: Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (ví dụ: “Yes, it is important because…”), rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể hỗ trợ. Sử dụng cấu trúc chuẩn (subject + verb) và tránh lặp từ. Giữ trong 2–3 câu.

예시: Yes, being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps build good relationships. If you are polite, people are more likely to treat you kindly and view you as well-mannered.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp nêu rõ các hoàn cảnh cụ thể (ví dụ: “at home, at school, at work, and in public”). Tránh dùng từ mơ hồ và câu lặp. Dùng liên từ để liệt kê (e.g., “for example”, “such as”) và viết 2–3 câu ngắn gọn.

예시: We should be polite in many situations, such as at home, at school, at work, and in public. For example, greeting people, saying thank you, and showing respect to strangers are all polite behaviors.

제안: Câu trả lời ổn nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp, loại bỏ từ thừa và làm cụ thể hơn bằng cách thêm một ví dụ ngắn (ví dụ: with grandparents or teachers). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề và thêm 1 câu minh họa. Giữ 2–3 câu.

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting people and saying “thank you” and “please” often. For example, I always helped my grandparents at home and said thank you when they gave me food.

× As a child, I may how learn to be born many from my grandparents and parents and also school where my teacher emphasized good manners.

✓ As a child, I learned many manners from my grandparents, my parents, and at school where my teacher emphasized good behavior.

This sentence has multiple structure and word-choice errors: incorrect modal 'may', wrong word order 'how learn', 'to be born' is irrelevant. Use simple past 'learned' to match past time frame. List sources with commas and use 'at school' and 'good behavior' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clear parts and use past tense verbs for childhood events.

× For example, they taught me how to say please and thank you and listen carefully when others speak and to so be back to elders.

✓ For example, they taught me how to say 'please' and 'thank you', to listen carefully when others speak, and to show respect to elders.

Errors include incorrect infinitive usage and awkward phrase 'to so be back to elders'. Use parallel infinitive forms 'to say', 'to listen', 'to show' for clarity. 'Show respect to elders' is the correct collocation. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× To be polite does mean it's so respect for others and be relationship if you polite to someone they might likely treat treat you kindly and people often see who behaviour as as being well mannered and educated.

✓ Being polite means showing respect for others and building good relationships. If you are polite to someone, they are likely to treat you kindly, and people often see polite behavior as a sign of good manners and education.

Multiple errors: awkward 'To be polite does mean', missing 'showing', incorrect verb forms 'be relationship', missing auxiliary 'are' in 'if you are polite', duplicated 'treat', 'who behaviour' wrong. Use present simple 'means' for general truth and parallel noun phrases. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× I think oh more situations we need to be polite, not just on some because you know what? Polite is on maximum minimum, minimum behavior. We do treat others in our daily life than sometimes.

✓ I think we need to be polite in many situations, not just some. Politeness should be a normal part of our daily behavior when we interact with others.

This contains filler 'oh', unclear phrases 'on maximum minimum', and awkward comparative structure. Use clear expressions: 'in many situations', 'normal part of our daily behavior'. Avoid filler words and ensure subject-verb clarity.

× As a child there I always show my polite to others around me.

✓ As a child, I always showed politeness to the people around me.

Tense mismatch: describing past habit requires past tense 'showed' not present 'show'. 'My polite' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'showed politeness' or 'was polite'. Place time phrase 'as a child' at beginning with comma.

× I say hello, thank you very often.

✓ I said 'hello' and 'thank you' very often.

Past habit should use past tense 'said'. Also connect the two expressions with 'and' for natural flow. Maintain tense consistency when talking about childhood.

× I also start to to show my my gratitude to someone and I also say please when I need help.

✓ I also started to show my gratitude to others, and I would say 'please' when I needed help.

Use past tense 'started' for childhood actions and past 'needed'. Remove duplicated words 'to to' and 'my my'. Use 'others' instead of 'someone' for generality. 'Would' can indicate habitual past actions.}]}{