Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify the meaning and use a clear structure: start with a direct topic sentence saying who taught you, then give one or two specific examples of how they taught you. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, plurals) and replace unclear words. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, they told me to greet elders with respect and to say “please” and “thank you” to strangers. They also corrected my manners when I forgot, so politeness became a habit.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and avoid word confusion (e.g., use 'politeness' not 'politics'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary: community, cooperation, mutual support.

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because we live together in a community. If we are kind and polite to others, they are more likely to help us in return, so politeness promotes cooperation and mutual support.

제안: Give a direct answer (e.g., 'always') and explain briefly why. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and provide one concrete example of daily situations.

예시: I believe we should be polite all the time, not only on special occasions, because politeness makes everyday interactions smoother. For example, being polite at work or when meeting neighbors helps build good relationships.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the specific action, then briefly explain its cultural meaning. Use correct words and give one concrete example of how you used them. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: As a child, I used Filipino honorifics like 'po' and 'opo' to show respect to elders. For instance, I always said 'salamat po' when thanking my grandparents, which showed politeness and respect in our culture.

× We both emails being practised being polite to elder and to strangers.

✓ We both practiced being polite to elders and to strangers.

The original sentence misuses 'being practised' and 'emails' is incorrect here. The intended meaning is past habit, so use simple past 'practiced'. 'Elder' should be plural 'elders'. Remove extra 'being' and incorrect word 'emails'. Use 'practiced' to match past context. Suggested improvement: Replace incorrect words with the simple past verb and plural noun: 'practiced' and 'elders'.

× So young.

✓ When we were young.

The fragment 'So young' lacks tense and subject. To express past time, use 'When we were young.' This provides a complete clause and matches the past context of learning politeness. Suggested improvement: Use a full clause with past tense: 'When we were young.'

× My parents already taught me that.

✓ My parents taught me that.

The adverb 'already' with simple past is acceptable but in this context the simple past 'taught' is sufficient and natural. If emphasizing completion before now, 'have already taught' (present perfect) could be used. Keep tense consistent: simple past fits the narrative about childhood. Suggested improvement: Use 'My parents taught me that.' or 'My parents have already taught me that.' depending on emphasis.

× Yes, because we are living in one city in one subduation.

✓ Yes, because we live in the same city in the same subdivision.

'Living in' is acceptable but 'are living' implies continuous present; simple present 'live' is more natural for permanent residence. 'One subduation' is incorrect word choice and spelling; likely 'same subdivision' is intended. Use 'same' rather than 'one' for shared location. Suggested improvement: Use 'we live in the same city in the same subdivision.'

× We are a community.

✓ We form a community.

'We are a community' is grammatically okay but 'form a community' better expresses the idea of being part of a communal group. If keeping original, it's acceptable; correction here improves clarity. Suggested improvement: Use 'We form a community.' or keep 'We are a community.' for simple statement.

× If we need help, then we need to show kindness and politics to other people so that other people will do the same thing.

✓ If we need help, we should show kindness and politeness to other people so that they will do the same.

'Politics' is the wrong word; 'politeness' is correct. Repetition 'other people' is clumsy; replace the second occurrence with 'they'. Use modal 'should' for advice. Remove 'then' as it's unnecessary. Suggested improvement: Use 'show kindness and politeness' and pronoun 'they' to avoid repetition.

× For me, it's truly not occasional.

✓ For me, it is not something occasional.

The phrase 'truly not occasional' is awkward. Use 'not something occasional' or 'not occasional' with clarity. Adding 'something' makes the sentence more natural. Suggested improvement: Say 'it is not something occasional'.

× It's not occasional.

✓ It is not occasional.

Contraction is acceptable, but 'It's not occasional' lacks context; 'not occasional' is grammatical but 'not something occasional' is clearer. Keep consistent phrasing. Suggested improvement: Prefer 'It is not something occasional.' for clarity.

× It should be a practice.

✓ It should be a practice.

Grammatically this sentence is acceptable, but more natural phrasing is 'It should be a regular practice.' Add 'regular' to convey habitual action. Suggested improvement: Use 'It should be a regular practice.' to emphasize habit.

× It should be a truly your to call this tribular balance.

✓ It should truly be what you call a moral balance.

This sentence contains multiple errors: word order, wrong words 'your', 'tribular' (likely 'tribal' or 'moral'), and unnatural structure. Reordering and choosing 'moral balance' or 'social balance' clarifies meaning. Use correct adverb placement: 'truly be' rather than 'be a truly'. Suggested improvement: Rephrase to 'It should truly be what you call a moral balance.'

× You should always need to be kind to others so others will be kind to you.

✓ You should always be kind to others so they will be kind to you.

'Should always need to' is incorrect; use either 'should always' or 'need to'. 'So others will be kind to you' repeats 'others'; replace with 'they'. Simplify modal usage: 'You should always be kind...' is natural. Suggested improvement: Use 'You should always be kind to others so they will be kind to you.'

× We speak Pope and Opo from Filipino and that is how we distribute kindness so that's what we do in our culture.

✓ We say 'Po' and 'Opo' in Filipino to show respect, and that is how we show kindness in our culture.

'Speak Pope and Opo' is incorrect; the Filipino polite words are 'po' and 'opo'. 'Speak' should be 'say' and 'distribute kindness' is unnatural; 'show kindness' is better. Clarify that these are respectful words in Filipino. Suggested improvement: Use 'We say "po" and "opo" in Filipino to show respect, and that is how we show kindness in our culture.'