Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は文法、語彙、意味の明確さに問題があります。まず文の主語・時制を正し、不要な語（例：wealthy girls）が混入している点を修正してください。回答はトピック文（I learned to be polite when...）で始め、理由や具体例（家族の影響、学校での経験など）を一つか二つの短い文で続けると自然で効果的です。接続語（for example, because, so）を使い、最大5文に収めてください。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my family when I was a child. For example, my parents always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they praised me when I behaved politely. Also, my teachers at school taught us manners, which reinforced those habits.

제안: 意味が不明瞭で語順や語彙の誤りが多いです。まず直接的な主張（Yes, it is very important.）を述べ、その後に理由を1〜2文で具体的に説明してください。理由には結果を含め（people feel respected, relationships improve）論理的接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使ってください。簡潔で明瞭な表現を心がけ、同じ意味の語の繰り返しを避けてください。

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect to others. When people are polite, conversations are more pleasant and it is easier to build good relationships. Therefore, politeness can help both personal and professional life.

제안: 回答は比較的理解できますが、語順や冠詞（a meeting）に注意してください。まず一般的な答え（We should be polite in many situations.）で始め、具体的な場面を列挙し、理由を一つ添えるとよいです。接続語（for example, such as, especially）を使って流れを滑らかにし、文は3文以内にまとめてください。

예시: We should be polite in many situations, especially in formal settings. For example, during business meetings, at official ceremonies, and when meeting someone for the first time. Being polite in these situations helps make a good impression.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが、文法（tense, pronouns）と語順の改善が必要です。まず過去形の簡潔な主文（I paid attention to my speech and behaviour.）を置き、その後で具体例（used polite words, waited my turn, stayed quiet）を列挙してください。接続詞（for example, and）で繋ぎ、冗長な表現を避けてください。

예시: As a child, I paid attention to how I spoke and behaved. For example, I used polite words like “please” and “thank you,” I waited my turn to speak, and I tried not to interrupt others.

× When I was child, there were a lot of white people such as Japanese near me, so I was so wealthy girls, but by seeing them I became to be quite nice for girls.

✓ When I was a child, there were a lot of white people, such as Japanese, near me, so I was taught to be polite like the girls I saw and became quite nice to other girls.

'When I was child' needs the article 'a' (singular/plural and article error). 'white people such as Japanese' needs commas and 'Japanese' refers to people so wording should be clearer. 'I was so wealthy girls' is ungrammatical and likely a confusion; corrected to 'I was taught to be polite like the girls I saw'. The sentence had singular/plural and article issues and unclear noun phrases; use 'a child' and ensure noun phrases match singular/plural and logical meaning. Suggested improvement: Add articles where needed, separate ideas with commas, and replace unclear phrases with precise verbs (e.g., 'taught to be polite').

× Yes, deep white is very important because Polite D polite doesn't make people uncomfortable with it Being polite makes yourself more good instead of using

✓ Yes, being polite is very important because it does not make people uncomfortable; being polite makes you a better person.

The original contains nonsensical phrases ('deep white', 'Polite D polite') and incorrect word forms. 'Being polite' should be the gerund subject. 'Makes yourself more good' has incorrect reflexive/pronoun and adjective use; correct to 'makes you a better person.' Use proper adverb/adjective forms and pronouns. Suggested improvement: Use 'being' + adjective to express general statements, choose correct pronouns ('you' not 'yourself' here), and use comparative adjective 'better' rather than 'more good'.

× maybe formal place like meeting or some celebration, that kind of formal place when you meet new person

✓ Maybe in formal places, like meetings or celebrations, such places when you meet a new person.

Missing prepositions and articles: 'formal place' should be plural or preceded by 'in', 'meeting' should be plural or 'a meeting', and 'new person' needs the article 'a'. Prepositions like 'in' and articles are required to make noun phrases grammatical. Suggested improvement: Use 'in formal places' and include articles ('a new person') or plural forms as appropriate to generalize.

× I took care of my how I speak and also how I behave. I control my mind not to do what I wanted to do that all that time thinking how they look to I stayed quiet.

✓ I took care of how I spoke and how I behaved. I controlled my impulses and did not do what I wanted; I was thinking about how they would see me, so I stayed quiet.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'my how I speak' incorrectly uses 'my' and present tense; should be 'how I spoke'. 'Control my mind' is unnatural; 'controlled my impulses' fits. 'How they look to I' misuses pronoun 'I' and word order; correct to 'how they would see me.' Ensure object pronoun 'me' is used. Suggested improvement: Use correct object pronouns ('me'), match tense (past) throughout, and use natural collocations like 'controlled my impulses' or 'controlled myself'.