Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence (who taught you), then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and grammar mistakes (use plural/singular consistently).

예시: My parents and teachers taught me to be polite when I was young. For example, my mother showed me table manners such as using a napkin and not speaking with my mouth full, and my teacher encouraged us to share snacks and take turns. These lessons helped me respect others in social situations.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with two specific reasons linked with cohesive devices. Correct grammar (use singular/plural and correct word forms) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘conflict’ not ‘confliction’).

예시: Yes, I believe good manners are essential for building positive relationships. First, politeness demonstrates respect, which helps people feel valued; moreover, it reduces conflicts because considerate behavior prevents misunderstandings and arguments.

제안: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar: start with a topic sentence listing occasions, then give brief examples. Fix word errors (‘places’, not ‘planets’) and use linking words. Avoid vague phrases like ‘make communications moral.’

예시: We should be polite both in formal settings and everyday life. For instance, in meetings or conferences we should use formal language and listen attentively; similarly, when talking with neighbors or store staff we should be courteous and say thank you.

제안: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples and reasons. Remove repetition and correct grammar (e.g., ‘taught us polite habits’, ‘gave up my seat’, ‘teachers instilled respect’, ‘it felt’). Use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’.

예시: At school, my teacher taught us polite habits, so I would often give up my seat for others and say thank you to elders. For example, I remember standing up for elderly passengers on the bus because my teacher emphasized that respecting elders is important.

× they taught me some basic uh, table manner, encourage me to share food to others.

✓ they taught me some basic table manners and encouraged me to share food with others.

Incorrect preposition 'to others' and missing parallel structure. Use 'share food with others' (correct preposition 'with') and plural 'table manners'. Also keep verb forms parallel: 'taught' and 'encouraged' (past tense) to match the surrounding past-tense context.

× Yes, I think the good manner are essential for the positive relationship with others.

✓ Yes, I think good manners are essential for positive relationships with others.

Subject-verb agreement and count noun form: 'manner' should be plural 'manners' to match 'are'. Article and noun number: drop 'the' before 'good manners' for general statement and use plural 'relationships' to match 'others'.

× It shows some basic respect and it also helps avoid unnecessary confliction between the people.

✓ It shows basic respect and also helps avoid unnecessary conflict between people.

Word choice: 'confliction' is incorrect; use 'conflict'. 'Some basic respect' is awkward for general statements; 'basic respect' is better. Omit 'the' before 'people' for general reference.

× We should be polite in the formal situation, like a conference, and also in daily interactions.

✓ We should be polite in formal situations, such as at a conference, and also in daily interactions.

Preposition and article usage: use plural 'formal situations' for generalization, and 'such as' is more natural than 'like' in formal answers. Use preposition 'at a conference' to indicate location.

× Planets show respect and make communications moral.

✓ People should show respect and make communication more polite.

Typo and word choice: 'Planets' is a typo for 'People'. 'Communications moral' is unnatural; use 'make communication more polite' or 'make interactions more civil'. Use 'should' to match recommendation tone.

× When I was at the school my my teacher told us polite habit so I would always give up my seat for the other people and say thank you to the elders.

✓ When I was at school, my teacher taught us polite habits, so I would always give up my seat for other people and say thank you to elders.

Article and redundancy: 'at the school' -> 'at school' for general attendance. Removed duplicate 'my'. Verb tense and form: 'told us polite habit' -> 'taught us polite habits'. Remove 'the' before 'other people' and 'the elders' -> 'elders' for general reference. Added commas for clarity.

× I learned this behavior because my teacher insights respect for the elders and it feel like the right thing to do.

✓ I learned this behavior because my teacher instilled respect for elders and it felt like the right thing to do.

Wrong verb choice and tense: 'insights' is incorrect; use 'instilled' (past tense past participle form) meaning 'taught or impressed'. 'It feel' should be past tense 'it felt' to match 'I learned'. Also drop 'the' before 'elders' for general reference.